The university education give several courses for students who are pursuing their dream. Especially, the university education aims to serve curriculum to cultivate experts of the various fields. However, in virtue of its high tuition, many students are deprived of the chances to enter university. So that the issue about the government's support for university of education needs to be considered seriously.
In case that the government support selectively for students who are suffering financial difficulty, the university education free of charge would be beneficial both for the society as whole and for individuals. The free university education can contribute to actualize the value of equality in education. For example, by supporting tuition which is normally considerably expensive for the students who are in destitute condition, the government can grant the opportunity of high level of education which would be impossible without the acid. And this opportunity of education plays important role in enhancing happiness of individuals, owing to the fact that the university education works as salient ground for future success. Furthermore, it is eventually advantageous for the whole society, because with this monetary support, diverse students who have great potentiality but are suffering difficulty can have chances to be well educated, and it leads to generate good human resource pool which is necessary for the progress of the society. For instance, Kim Buseong, who is renown business man of Korea, had been helped by government for university, so that he could be a figure who gives huge positive effect on the society.
However, the support for all university students are not realistic and even deleterious to quality of education. High quality of education requires enormous amount of finance. If the government take responsibility for all tuition needed to run university education, the burden of the government will be as huge as impossible to deal with. For example, in Korea, government is trying to cover many proportion of university tuition, but this attempts gave excessive burden on the government. So that eventually it is expected to give negative repercussion on the quality of education.
All in all, the university education should not be free of charge. It is not realistic and practical. However, for individuals and society both, the system to help students who are in destitute condition should be operated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun proportion seems to be countable; consider using: 'many proportions'.
Suggestion: many proportions
...in Korea, government is trying to cover many proportion of university tuition, but this attempt...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ave excessive burden on the government. So that eventually it is expected to give negat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43455497382 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04757917419 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479057591623 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2453815197 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184170169512 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805046343934 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777824021653 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146646186837 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426795230035 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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