Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgment.

In democratic society, there are many situation when the will of the people and the will of the government conflicts against each other. To make better society, it is salient to adjust the disagreement between two forces.

In cases that the policy is related with the field of the culture, the government should follow the opinion of the general people. Because the goal of this kind of the policy is to enhance the pleasure and happiness of the people. For example, when the governors consider the place of the national festival, the decision should reflect the will of the people. If the government makes decision regardless of the preference of the people, the festival would be less enjoyable for the participants. In addition, when the government thinks of the policy to cultivate their own culture for tourism, the policy should be based on the trend on the people. Becuause the subject of the developing the culture is always the member of the society, although the government can conduct ancillary actions.

However, when we consider the other fields in regard with the policies that have more fundamental influence on the society as whole, the government should carry out their decision based on the expection of results. Because the governor usually have more information themselfe and they can access easily to the analysis of experts as well. For example, when the governor deals with the issue about the safety of the people, such as military force, it is more reasonable to make decision according to the analysis of the situation rather than the arbitrary opinion of the public. Unless they make decision with acumen, the result of the failure in this kind of field would be seriously harmful for whole society. For instance, it is not plausible for Sout Korean government to decide their policy against North Korea depending on the opinions of the people who have less reliable information.

Moreover, in event that the government make policies about the large scale economy, they should carry their own decision made with the economists. Because the field is highly complicate to be well understood by the normal people. So that government should consider many factors about the economy to make long term plan to manage the finance of the nation. For example, few decades ago, when Korea government tried to sign the Free Trade Agreement with US, there were significant conflicts between people. However except the governors and experts who cooperated with them, only few people have enough information to make proper decision. Therefore, the government had to make their own decision based on the expectation made with the experts to make positive outcome for the whole society.

In surmmary, the goverment should follow the will of the people when the policy is about the entertainment and culture. However, because they have more information, when the policy is related with the decision which would effect on the safety and the large scale economy, they should make their own decision grounded on the expectation of the results.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many situations'.
Suggestion: many situations
In democratic society, there are many situation when the will of the people and the wil...
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Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
In democratic society, there are many situation when the will of the people and the wil...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... own decision made with the economists. Because the field is highly complicate to be we...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'complicated'.
Suggestion: complicated
...economists. Because the field is highly complicate to be well understood by the normal peo...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e well understood by the normal people. So that government should consider many factors...
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Line 7, column 506, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e significant conflicts between people. However except the governors and experts who co...
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Line 9, column 223, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...s related with the decision which would effect on the safety and the large scale econo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 503.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08747514911 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56309693697 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403578528827 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 3.10617977528 451% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5162826651 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9523809524 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22880461185 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809385559141 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674846707741 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15552829411 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274977408588 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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