Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one s ability to relate and connect to other people Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that comm

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Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one's ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Recently, increasing people have paid attention to how to build stronger and varied social connections with other people. Some people believe that living in different places contributes to the ability of strengthening connections with others, while other people think we should facilitate our understanding of local community. From my perspective, I consider that the mutual ideas toward this issue are not necessarily exclusive.
Firstly, living and traveling in different places do good to improve the probability of meeting aliened people and build new relationship among them. In that case, it is possible to become a social person by exchanging our ideas and interests with latest friends. An appropriate example cannot be far away. For example, for the sake of finding the adaptive space rocket techniques, the CEO of Elon Musk traveled to many places and research centers for finding suitable and efficient engineers. In this way, he built a powerful and obdurate team after many meetings and interviews in different places. Otherwise, Elon Musk cannot catch the opportunity of founding such great SpaceX company without the frequent traveling and living in many places.
Furthermore, it is universally acknowledged that a thorough investigation for the local cultural and economic surroundings contributes to deep learning of associated community. By obtaining more information from local museums and libraries, we can get more useful and practical information regarding to endemic history.
Finally, I deem it necessary to learn more knowledge from careful investigation in terms of the community's cultural background and government policies. At the same time, the opportunities of frequent traveling can also facilitate the development of new friendship with other people. By doing so, the foreign countries would open the doors to new ideas and changes, which provide different life possibilities for new generation.
Overall, in order to learn more knowledge and useful information from other places and communities, we should take the advantages of traveling and develop the deep understanding of community. Otherwise, the bias of each side will pose negative impacts on the building of people relationship and the comprehensive understanding of our society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...n by exchanging our ideas and interests with latest friends. An appropriate example cannot ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, while, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62209302326 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11365300667 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561046511628 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6013276974 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.875 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255369488806 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072815240552 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956404562383 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135966088115 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114520686399 0.0667264976115 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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