Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility

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Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

Sports and movies are watched across the world by millions of people. They definitely have a strong impact on the people across nation. The prompt here, states that sports stars and movie stars have a responsibility to behave as role model to youngsters who look upto them. I mostly disagree with this for the following three reasons. Although, I concede that if they do so, it does have a great impact on the young people who look upto them as heroic figures.
Firstly, we should not forget that sports stars and movie actors are normal people like everyone of us and no one is perfect. They should have the freedom to express and behave the way they want. For example, with the current world of social media where they are being photographed everywhere, such responsibility becomes a huge burden on them, mentally. Atlast, they are also people like us who are allowed to commit mistakes. Hence, for these reasons, sports starts and movie actors should have their freedom, and it is not correct to put such responsibity on them.
Second of all, sports/movies is just their profession, which they are good at. Obligating them to always be perfect in their personal life as well to serve as role models to youth of the country is highly incorrect. Their responsiblity is to entertain the audience and if possible spread some social message/awareness through their films, incase of movie actors. For example, a sports person will be spending most of his days in practice matches and fitness, and might want to have sufficient time to give enough time to think about being perfect. For reasons like these, sports stars and actors in movies should not be burdened with such responsibities.
Further, thet are being paid millions of dollars for their work, for their professional excellence and not to serve as role models to youngsters. It is important for them to solely focus on their professions and be good at it as it is major source of entertainment across the nation. Hence, they should not be obligated to serve as role models to the nation's youth.
In conclusion, although it is important for movie who are looked upto by young peple of the nation to behave properly, as they impact many lives, we should not forget that they are common people like anyone of us and should have the freedom to be themselves and they are being paid for their work and their art in their profession.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58706815819 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463768115942 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6354165452 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.105263158 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441874428963 0.243740707755 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148033024643 0.0831039109588 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820450367568 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278333083984 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832389008879 0.0667264976115 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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