Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility

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Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.

Sports and movies are watched across the world by millions of people. They definitely have a strong impact on the people across nation. The prompt here, states that sports stars and movie stars have a responsibility to behave as a role model to youngsters who look up to them. I mostly disagree with this for the following three reasons.
Firstly, we should not forget that sports stars and movie actors are normal people like everyone of us and no one is perfect. They should have the freedom to express and behave the way they want. For example, with the current world of social media where they are being photographed everywhere, such responsibility becomes a huge burden on them. At last, they are also people like us who are allowed to commit mistakes. Hence, for these reasons, sports starts and movie actors should have their freedom, and it is not correct to put such responsibility on them.
Second of all, sports/movies is just their profession, which they are good at. Obligating them to be perfect in their personal life, to serve as role models to youth of the country is highly incorrect. Their responsibility is to entertain the audience and if possible spread some social message/awareness through their films (in case of movie actors). For example, a sports person will be spending most of his days in practice matches and fitness related activities, and might not have sufficient time to think about being perfect. For reasons like these, sports stars and actors in movies should not be burdened with such responsibilities.
Further, they are being paid millions of dollars for their work, for their professional excellence and not to serve as role models to youngsters. It is important for them to solely focus on their professions and be good at it as it is major source of entertainment across the nation. Hence, they should not be obligated to serve as role models to the nation's youth.
In conclusion, although it is important for movie stars and sports starts, who are looked up to by young people of the nation to behave properly, as they impact many lives, we should not forget that they are common people like anyone of us and should have the freedom to be themselves and they are being paid for their work.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, so, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81558441558 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67356391434 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451948051948 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4218963254 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3888888889 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473191174597 0.243740707755 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159376789085 0.0831039109588 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101267454913 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311355399264 0.150359130593 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836468161624 0.0667264976115 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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