"Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility." -
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing & supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In this world of competition everyone want's to reach the top and hence they choose the youth
choose their role models in the direction they wan't to progress. This young generation is the
future of our country. Sports stars and entertainment stars are inspirations to a large number of
youth and the author claims that as they are paid millions of dollars they are obliged to behave as
role models. Many youngsters follow this sports and movie stars but we can't say that it is stars
duty to behave as a role model.
"Right to choose" is what every citizen of a country is provided with. At a very small age the
children get influenced by this stardom and high life of the stars. But, we can't even expect from
the celebrities that they should go in the direction where the public suggests and wants them to
go. It's even their right to choice whether he want's to live a peaceful life with no interference from
the public or to go to encourage people to follow their footsteps.
These stars are a huge amount and the author suggests here that this should be the reason to
become role models, but the aren't able to see that they are paid for their work. If a movie star
want's to encourage youth he/she may if he/she wants, it can never be their duty to do so.
During the teen life of every youngsters, everyone want's to get big enough and want's the
world to know them. Here, they need to choose their role model in the direction in which they
wan't to go in the future. Now, it their choice to go on the corresponding path. They need to find
for themselves the correct role model.
In this world where every human is considered to be at the same level, we can't just expect
someone to fulfill the Sports stars and entertainment stars are inspirations to a large number of
youth just because of his/her stardom and income he/she is paid.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Choose
... top and hence they choose the youth choose their role models in the direction they...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Future
...ogress. This young generation is the future of our country. Sports stars and entert...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...entertainment stars are inspirations to a large number of youth and the author claims that as ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Role
...ollars they are obliged to behave as role models. Many youngsters follow this spo...
^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... role models. Many youngsters follow this sports and movie stars but we cant say ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...llow this sports and movie stars but we cant say that it is stars duty to behave ...
^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Duty
...ars but we cant say that it is stars duty to behave as a role model. 'R...
^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...ovided with. At a very small age the children get influenced by this stardom and high...
^^^^^^^^
Line 16, column 77, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...dom and high life of the stars. But, we cant even expect from the celebrities tha...
^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Go
...he public suggests and wants them to go. Its even their right to choice whether...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ceful life with no interference from the public or to go to encourage people to ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Become
...re that this should be the reason to become role models, but the arent able to see ...
^^^^^^
Line 27, column 29, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...eason to become role models, but the arent able to see that they are paid for thei...
^^^^^
Line 27, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... see that they are paid for their work. If a movie star wants to encourage yout...
^^
Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Wants
...paid for their work. If a movie star wants to encourage youth he/she may if he/she...
^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: World
...ants to get big enough and wants the world to know them. Here, they need to choose...
^^^^^
Line 35, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Want
...model in the direction in which they want to go in the future. Now, it their choi...
^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...orresponding path. They need to find for themselves the correct role model. ...
^^^
Line 40, column 75, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... considered to be at the same level, we cant just expect someone to fulfill the S...
^^^^
Line 42, column 81, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...entertainment stars are inspirations to a large number of youth just because of his/her stardo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 44, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Youth
...re inspirations to a large number of youth just because of his/her stardom and inc...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67256637168 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37521567041 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457227138643 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9281284825 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.53333333333 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.97078651685 422% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307556607172 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106675561077 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803010410688 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984036122221 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703266144129 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.38706741573 79% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 100.480337079 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.