The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general well-being of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many people tend to introduce their country to others by mentioning some of the most prominent figures in that nation’s history. It makes them feel proud of their own country and allows a sense of belonging. In my opinion, however, this imagined ‘greatness’ is not what truly determines a nation’s value. Rather, I argue that the well-being of its people demonstrates the genuine power of a country in two ways.
First of all, a great country is one where its society is integrated. A society consists of numerous different groups, in terms of economic class, gender, region, religious beliefs, etc. If the conflicts between these groups are not managed appropriately, a country may fall apart without resistance in times of hardship. Take, for example, Brazil. One of its most celebrated cities, Rio de Janeiro, enjoys the heritage of multiculturalism and economic affluence. Nevertheless, the mountainsides that look down the beaches bustling with riches and entertainment are home to millions of the poorest members of the Brazilian society. Favelas, as they are called, are replete with gunshots and illegal drugs, as powerful gangs and equally brutal police forces make war on the streets every day. These two different worlds exist only a boulevard across from each other. While the economic inequality may not have been critical to the country's power during halcyon times, the pandemic of COVID19 has revealed the irrevocable errors of the Brazilian society. Watching the news of collective infections in slums and drug towns, false vaccine injections, and call for presidential impeachment, no one would consider Brazil a desirable, nor even healthy, country. As we can see through this example, a country whose citizens are not unified for economic and social reasons cannot withstand the crisis as fatal as the ongoing epidemic.
Some could still argue that the international status of a country is mostly enhanced by the accomplishments of intellectuals, artists, and politicians. Regardless of the crisis, people will remember France as the nation of Van Gogh and Victor Hugo; Poland as the birthplace of the legendary scientist that was Marie Qurie. Nonetheless, in many cases, the quality of life of the general population is not directly affected by an artist's prowess or scientific insight. A country could invest all its resources to nurture a handful of geniuses, but still neglect the basic needs of most of its citizens. For instance, even with all the influential entrepreneurs like Mawin of Alibaba and the movie stars like Jackie Chan, would China deserve the title of greatness when it persecutes its people who cry for freedom and democracy in Hong Kong? As long as war continues on the border regions next to Tibet, making millions of people to flee from their ancestors' lands, China with all its thousands of years of priceless cultural heritage will not be truly appreciated as a admirable nation by the generations to come.
In conclusion, a greatness of a country cannot be evaluated based solely on the brilliance of a few elites. There is no guarantee that their talents will be beneficial to the society in whole. The true determining factor of the value of a nation is the happy life of the ordinary people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'numerous'.
Suggestion: numerous
...ty is integrated. A society consists of numerous different groups, in terms of economic class, gen...
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Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
...pulation is not directly affected by an artists prowess or scientific insight. A countr...
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Line 3, column 1066, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ritage will not be truly appreciated as a admirable nation by the generations to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2722.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 531.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12617702448 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90009171458 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578154425612 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7155364641 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.416666667 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171152656264 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436701774162 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459272258615 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104831184807 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549007247472 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 100.480337079 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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