The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities Recently we signed a contract with the Fly Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast food w | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the memo from the vice president of the food distribution company, the author argues that the company opt for the service of Buzzoff Pest Control Company for all of its food storage warehouses instead of employing another company, Fly-Away, at the same time for economy’s sake. The vice president has reached this conclusion based on the comparison between the amount of loss of food in the two warehouses in Palm City and Wintervale and on the calculation of cost between maintaining status quo and returning to full entrustment to Buzzoff. However, before this argument can be fully evaluated, three evidences must be provided.
First of all, the author needs to supply the evidence that the difference of the amount of the food destroyed in the warehouse in Palm City and the one in Wintervale is caused by the two companies’ abilities to prevent pest. It may be that the infrastructure of the Palm City warehouse was more dated than the Wintervale storage system. Thus, even if the two companies were level in terms of their service quality, the distinct environments of each warehouse resulted in the difference of $10,000 worth of loss. Another possibility is that climate in Palm City is markedly more detrimental to fast-food storing or pest control, and thus, more loss is inevitable. If either of these scenarios has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, the vice president must bring the evidence that demonstrates the performance of each company considering the before-and-after of the warehouses of their responsibility. Perhaps, the loss of food in Palm City storage system was greater than $20,000 before Fly-Away took control. Buzzoff, on the other hand, might have failed to maintain its service and destroyed more stock than last year. In this way, Fly-Away could have saved more money than what Buzzoff had lost. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
Lastly, the evidence that current condition will lead to the same consequences in the future should be offered. There is a possibility that Fly-Away’s service improve beyond expectation in the years to come. Given that it was only recently that Fly-Away started managing the warehouses, after a few more years of experience, it would find the optimal way to reduce damage. If Buzzoff takes control of the entire storage system’s pest issue, it might apply the same method for various types of environments and might not succeed in curtailing the loss below $10,000 per month, whereas Fly-Away performs better while charging less. In this case, the strength of the argument is dwindled.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the vice president is able to provide the evidences above through more detailed investigation, then it will be possible to properly evaluate the validity of the proposal to replacing Fly-Away completely with Buzzoff.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, whereas, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2504.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15226337449 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86924842005 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497942386831 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5136282539 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.2 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338481393865 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085897330141 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908205676666 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182929698976 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760604667846 0.0628817314937 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, whereas, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments