The surest indicator of a great nation is represented by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
In the contemporary world, there are many factors that are used to measure whether a nation is great enough. Many people believe that the most important indicator of an excellent country is represented by the achievements of its rulers, artists or scientists rather than the general welfare of its residents. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with this idea for the reason that the welfare of citizens of a nation is the most essential element to measure a country if it is an illustriousness nation.
First of all, many people may hold the view that the achievements of its rulers, artists and scientists are crucial for a nation to reflect its great. The reason they hold is that both these factors could influence either the local people or the whole world, if they create a variety of treasures in those fields. For example, if an artist is famous for his productions, he would influence his country by his works and he would also be popular all over the world so that he reflects the success of a nation. Jack Chen is a famous actor for his excellent martial arts action. He has appeared in many films and left a lot of classic images in movies. Both these products are great indicators of his nation since he has been popular around the world. Moreover, 5G will be an advanced technology around the world in the future. If a country could solve the problems about 5G and invent some skills in advance, it will not only make benefit for its residents but also play an important role in the international world. Therefore, those who support the achievements of its rulers artists and scientists represent a great nation would totally agree that only all fields listed above could indicate a great nation.
However, although both these developments related to rulers artists and scientists may reveal the success of a country, the most important factor for me is the general welfare of its people. Because all of the residents are composed of a country, if they still live in a harsh environment, even if the rulers, artists or scientists have made great progress, I have to say that this country could not be defined as a great country. For example, there are many famous countries around the world like Switzerland. Although Switzerland does not have very advanced technology or famous artists, it is still a great nation and its good reputation has been admitted by the whole world. People may ask why? It is definitely because of the good welfare of its citizens. They live in a beautiful environment, they have a good education system, hospitals, working conditions and so on. People who live there will not worry about losing jobs or getting ill. Since if these circumstances happen, the government will help them to solve it not just totally by themselves. Hence, in my opinion, I strongly support that good welfare could reveal a great nation.
To sum up, even if the achievements of rulers artists and scientists are important for a country to indicate its success, I still think that welfare is the crucial indicator for a great country since only when the people live a happy life and they can get good welfare can this nation be called great in the true sense.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... general welfare of its people. Because all of the residents are composed of a country, if...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2628.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 554.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74368231047 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63976194565 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398916967509 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3729135486 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.260869565 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0869565217 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47826086957 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421297109732 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127599674528 0.0831039109588 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142683203764 0.0758088955206 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312820033829 0.150359130593 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486756499766 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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