Some people that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports. Others believe that it is best use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In this rapidly developing society, parents often need to deal with work tasks that take up a lot of time on this occasion they barely have plenty time to accompany their kids. Some people believe that playing games or sports with children is a better choice to make good use of that time. While others hold the view that parents should company their children to accomplish their school tasks at this time. In my opinion, I completely agree with the former view because of reasons as below.
To begin with, playing games or sports together is conducive to parents to form a joyous family atmosphere and cultivate an intimate relationship with their children during spare time. Some amusement activities such as computer games or physical exercises are extremely relaxed and delightful when parents join these items along with kids. In this case, parents and children would enjoy a period of pleasant family time without the pressure of the work and study. On the other hand, there are some recreational games or sports that require both parents and kids to participate in because they need to work together to overcome various difficulties and get a satisfied result eventually. Through a serious of play processes, parents and children not only get to understand each other better but also develop a good sense of cooperation so that they would have a closer relationship than merely doing homework together within that time. Therefore, parents should reasonable plan free time to play with their children.
Moreover, spending time playing with children is beneficial to children’s growth. Teenagers have already gained knowledge from the teachers at school, and by playing with their parents, they may learn more valuable things that cannot be obtained from class, which is also important for their future development. For instance, lase weekend, I played basketball with my parents and neighbors. Firstly, I always missed the shuttlecock and was extremely depressed. After some rounds, I decided to give up. While my parents told me I should not give up easily. Finally, I found my problems and solved them.
Last but not least, children may be tired of learning in the case parents demand them to study schoolwork during their rest time. It is a widely acknowledged that nowadays students need to learn a good deal of subjects and accomplish lots of assignments when they are at campus thus they barely get relaxation at all. Under this circumstance, if parents still require them to study schoolwork at their breathing space, they may lose interest in learning and have a poor relationship with parents. From the above discussion, doing something related to school tasks with parents at free time would cause pressure for children.
To sum up, by playing games and sports, parents would develop a closer relationship with their children. In addition, kids would also make a further achievement in the near future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...fter some rounds, I decided to give up. While my parents told me I should not give up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09375 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61969619607 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5604568075 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.304347826 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8695652174 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418166559308 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124618287527 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952151278962 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236414485868 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980405143328 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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