Some people that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports. Others believe that it is best use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In this rapidly developing society, as parents in the family, their responsibilities are to deal with working tasks or business to support the family, and that would take up most percentage of the time. On this occasion, parents barely have enough time to accompany their kids. When they have some spare time by chance, some people believe that playing games or sports with children is a better choice to make good use of that time. While others hold the view that parents should company their children to accomplish their school tasks at this time. In my opinion, I completely agree with the former view because of reasons as below.
To begin with, playing games or sports together is conducive to parents to form a joyous family atmosphere and cultivate an intimate relationship with their children during spare time. Some amusement activities such as computer games or physical exercises are extremely relaxed and delightful when parents join these items along with kids. In this case, parents and children would enjoy a period of pleasant family time without the pressure of the work and study. On the other hand, there are some recreational games or sports that require both parents and kids to participate in because they need to work together to overcome various difficulties and get a satisfied result eventually. Through a serious of play processes, parents and children not only get to understand each other better but also develop a good sense of cooperation so that they would have a closer relationship than merely doing homework together within that time. Therefore, it would be reasonable for parents to plan free time to play with their children.
Moreover, spending time playing with children is beneficial to children’s growth. Teenagers have already gained knowledge from the teachers at school, and by playing with their parents, they may learn more valuable things that cannot be obtained from class, which is also crucial for their future development. For instance, last weekend, I played basketball with my parents and neighbors. At the beginning, I missed the shuttlecock almost every hit and was extremely depressed. And gradually I came across the idea to quit. However, at the same time, my parents were so patient and give me plenty of instructions and encouragement, from which I learnt that giving up in the middle would always be the loser. The best solution is to insist to the end of the game, even I lost, I would still earn the proud from them. Also, it taught to be more patient in order to really getting inputs from each experience I’ve been through since I grasped couple knowledge of basketball games and solved a few accurate related issues regarding to my moving actions for shot which truly improved my skills in basketball area
Last but not least, children may be tired of learning in the case parents demand them to study schoolwork during their rest time. It is a widely acknowledged that nowadays students need to learn a good deal of subjects and accomplish lots of assignments when they are at campus, and it leads to the result that they barely get relaxation at all. Under this circumstance, if parents still require them to study schoolwork at their breathing space, they may lose interest in learning and have a poor relationship with parents. From the above discussion, doing something related to school tasks with parents at free time would make children have the feeling of stressful and result in a controversial expectation from parents.
To sum up, by playing games and sports, parents would develop a closer relationship with their children. In addition, kids would also make a further achievement in a few.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 105.0 52.1666666667 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3064.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 613.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99836867863 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66291915739 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47308319739 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 928.8 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4068571368 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.666666667 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5416666667 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.54166666667 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432185769365 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127803199261 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989839388228 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24200499036 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108664170821 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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