After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
A controversial issue relating to whether students should take a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that it is important for students to take a year off to join work or visit another country after completing high school. From a personal point of view, the above statement is agreeable for some reasons as below.
To begin with, experiencing different kind of occupation or having a tour would make young teenagers more clear about which career suit them to pursue all the life. To be more specific, nowadays a number of young people barely understand what the development of the society is like and which profession worth them to follow in the future. In this case, if they could have some time to try diverse works in the community and take a journey to their desired places after graduating from high school, youngsters would possess a deeper recognition and experience of contemporary society and thus make a decision about their major in the college. As a result of first-hand experience, the youth would pay attention to their careers. On the contrary, if juveniles directly join the college and never have a chance to undergo the real society life, they may find that they are not suitable for the specialty since the domain may be choose by their parents or tutors rather than their own knowledge. Therefore, it is absolutely necessary for adolescents to undergo periodic time to take a job or travel before they entering a university.
What is more, pupils would learn that life is full of hardship and be willing to devote more energy and time to study if they could participate in a profession and take a tour to another country after finishing high school. It is widely acknowledged that modern children have putted in most of their energy to study and spend much time on campus so that they have few opportunities to experience life outside the school and. Contrary to always staying at school, if the youth go through social life, they may realize that every penny is hard won and their present life is deserving to be cherished. Thus, they would take their researches more seriously and receive more accomplishments in the future. In contrast, without undergoing life in society, youngsters would consider that life is always so easiness even if they graduate from the university so that they may waste plenty of valuable study time. However, it would be a tough moment for them when they are trying to find a job in a competitive society. Therefore, every kid should comprehend the real world in advance and put much of their energy to the academic area.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, adolescents should spend at least a year off to take a enterprise or journey before they start learning at a college because those treasured acquaintances would let them realize the befitting domain for them and they would also more value campus life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1009, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...n their own knowledge. Therefore, it is absolutely necessary for adolescents to undergo periodic tim...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...enny is hard won and their present life is deserving to be cherished. Thus, they would take ...
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Line 4, column 101, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hould spend at least a year off to take a enterprise or journey before they start...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, at least, in contrast, kind of, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82456140351 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64170889804 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479532163743 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0517255628 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.588235294 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1764705882 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340506644166 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110608979518 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12902913706 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258202772283 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153373586997 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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