Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
With the improvement of social living standard, a large number of residents are willing to travel in diverse locations for entertainment.When it comes to what kind of journey places can visitors benefit more, opinion varies among people with different standpoints. Some individuals claims that traveling in our own country will bring more benefits than traveling to foreign countries. As far as I am concerned, I totally disagree with this point. To substantiate my point of view, two reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, taking a trip abroad enables tourists to comprehend particular foreign cultures that are entirely distinctive from our own. Due to different historical processes as well as environment factors, there would be numerous dissimilitudes in citizens' daily habits between local and other countries such as dietary favors, festival customs and universal languages and so on. From the differences discussed above, if visitors plan to have a tour overseas instead of native places, they may taste the local cuisine with special ingredients and spices, know what are the major festivals of the local residents and how do they celebrate them, learn a few of commonly used languages, for example, how to greet other person. With this series of attempts and experiences, visitors not only broaden their horizons but also leave a cherish memory about this foreign journey that would be sustained the whole life. On the contrary, by traveling in native spots, sightseers barely know a host of unique cultures since these attractions are much more similar to what they've already knew before so that this scenery would not impressing visitors a lot. Therefore, traveling overseas would bring diverse life experiences to tourists.
In addition, traveling in other states would improve people's abilities in all aspects. To be more specific, there would be some unexpected issues coming up in the journey, for instance, visitors may lost their directions in a totally different environment and completely do not know local habits. Under this circumstance, people must push them to deal with these challenges immediately, they would ask help from citizens or handle them totally by themselves. Through the process of problem solving, they may cultivate a number of abilities such as keep calm in an emergency, communicate with foreigners and believe in themselves in all situations. Both these rare qualities would be with people throughout their lives and produce positive results. On the contrary, when tourists travel in a familiar surroundings, they would definitely turn to someone they've known for help without dealing them by deep thinking if something goes wrong during the trip. Hence, it is more worthwhile for sightseers to travel abroad.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion that having a trip in foreign countries not only offer visitors a chance to understand many outstanding cultures but also foster a variety of valuable abilities which would accompany them for the rest of their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29652351738 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84338602282 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570552147239 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4286023701 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.888888889 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297879676288 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953818671374 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726906463799 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188784574583 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721849354105 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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