Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
One of the benefits of contemporary society is that there are more job opportunities so that young generations have more chances to choose their own future career. Some individuals believe that it is better for children to select the same occupations as their parents. While others hold the view that doing the jobs that are different from parents' jobs is more satisfying. In my opinion, I completely agree with the former view because of reasons as below.
To begin with, parents would provide a number of working experiences for youth when they are deciding to do similar jobs with them. Adults who have been working for decades are like experts in their professional fields because they possess outstanding job skills as well as good relationships with colleagues. Under this circumstance, if young people pursue identical occupations with their parents after graduation, it is an unexceptionable occasion for them to learn what technical abilities need to master at work or how to get along with fellows from parents. In this case, they could adapt to the new working environment more quickly under the guidance of parents. In contrast, a young man who does a various job from parents in a competitive society, great challenges and small improvements may met by him when he just start to work without the help of parents. Therefore, parents play an important role in their children's careers that are equivalent to them.
Moreover, young individuals who do the similar enterprises with their parents are more likely to gain success. Nowadays, there are a lot of graduates choose to leave parents to pursue their own business careers in modern cities. Due to the huge competition and complex requirements that work brings, it is almost impossible for youth to completely achieve their goal by themselves in rapidly changing cities. On the contrary, through the work skills and promotion opportunities offered by parents, those who choose to do the equal jobs with parents are easier to make progresses and attain accomplishments than children who select a desired job differ with parents. Hence, with the assistance from parents, kids would make great achievements in their future life.
Finally, the satisfying occupations that utterly disparate from parents may not suitable for young people. Some young individuals who are influenced by social trends choose to find current fashionable jobs that are totally diverse from parents. However, these enterprises have many disadvantages including that children may earn a little money and hardly attain great developments. From the above discussion, there are many drawbacks to the jobs that the youth choose by themselves compared to the jobs that are similar to parents' professions.
To sum up, if children carry on occupations that parallel with parents, they can not only obtain working experiences but also bear successful fruits. Doing the same jobs as parents may provide more progress for kids than doing the different jobs from parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the same occupations as their parents. While others hold the view that doing the job...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in contrast, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2517.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22199170124 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82720408459 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489626556017 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7399417764 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9523809524 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48427823322 0.236089414692 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160436512735 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113359820588 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319685035968 0.150856017488 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405880476354 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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