Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of
Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related
illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber
of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of
life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the
proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts
In this argument, we are informed that workers in Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in Masonton, a larger city than Leeville. Also, a smaller proportion of people in Leeville are diagnosed with stress-related illness. The Leevillle chamber of commerce attributes these two factors to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in L. While I concede that such a lifestyle could result in a healthier physical and mental state, I maintain that other plausible explanations can also account for the facts presented in this argument. However, with only the current information, we are unable to decide which explanation is best. Nor is it utterly certain that one factor alone is responsible for the facts that presented in the argument.
To begin with,the chamber of commerce claims that L workers take fewer sick days due to better health. While I admit that this might be the case, I also argue that fewer sick days taken by the local workers do not spring from a healthier state. Absence of significant information contributes to the failure to rule out the possibility that workers would still attend work even if they were seriously ill. More specifically, the workers’ limited absence from work in L may not lie in their satisfactory health conditions, but could be ascribed to a strict or even harsh working disciplines. What is of equal possibility is that L’s workers themselves are reluctant to take sick days, which would be explained by their passion for job. In addition, it will be unfair to keep blind to the possible scenario wherein the smaller number of sick days than by workers could also derive from sparse population of local workers. All of the aforementioned explanations pose a great challenge upon, if not utterly reverse, the proposed one in the argument.
In addition, the author ascribes a lower proportion of diagnoses of illness in L to the relaxed pace of life. However, the proportion of diagnoses alone does not indicates a healthier state of people in L. The lower proportion could also be explained by unsatisfactory medical resources in L, both in terms of the number of hospitals and the capabilities of local doctors. If this is case, then the relaxed pace of life in L is less responsible, if at all, for local people health, since citizens could be suffering from a variety of diseases, which have been neither diagnosed nor treated.
Even if workers are indeed healthier than workers in M, it is doubtful that the relaxed pace of life is the only factor. Generally speaking, good physical and mental state stem from a variety of factors;appealing environment, pleasant social relationships and the health diets. While we cannot assert that these factors are present and lead directly to local people’s good health, we are confident that these explanation could rival the one proposed in the argument.
To summarize, although it is reasonable to believe that a relaxed lifestyle contributes to better health, there are several alternative explanations that could be challenge the author’s one and can also plausible account for the fact presented in the argument. However, it is unreasonable to draw hasty conclusions about which explanation is best until further examination concerning L town is performed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: indicate
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Suggestion: indicate
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, while, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07962962963 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93343796577 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453703703704 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 862.2 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2753293717 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.681818182 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207974177073 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691075605177 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950046881033 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107216941593 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830825918036 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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