The human mind always works without a break depending on the type of task that is performed. Especially in a place like a city where the economy is always fluctuating leading to either prosperous or plummeting results. In the evidence above mentioned, the author is assuming that small towns like villages will promote greater longevity than city life.
Firstly, the city life is always busy, this is because a vast majority of the people come to work for their livelihood. The economy of the state will only rise because of the profits from the small-large scale industries, IT sectors, Finance firms, etc. To achieve the profit target, the employees or workers should do their job without any breaks or distractions. This further affects the mental health of the people, but they cannot have this laid-back mindset, as this will affect the profits earned by the company negatively. Although this seems a little frustrating for some people, they should know that without the economy, their wealth is negligible. Without providing the data about the work culture of the company residing in the city, it is impossible to tell people to leave the city and move to a small town.
Moreover, we should know about the age-group of the residents living in the city. Indeed, people over the age of 70 are much more vulnerable to all kinds of diseases and the hectic city life can further impede their health. In small towns, there is considerably less noise, air, and other kinds of pollution when compared to city life. Every human being as they grow old needs tranquility and are more sensitive to harsh environments. This could be a reason why old people are moving to small towns. The author says that there are very few physicians in the small town when compared to Mason city, there could be a reason that majority of the people living in the city are dealing with stress and anxiety because of the work, which further explains why they have more physicians than the small town. Furthermore, the author is not considering the complexities of city life and is relying on the findings based on superficial facts.
In conclusion, without presenting cogent facts that bolster their claim, this argument doesn't hold any water.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9124668435 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51553720827 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525198938992 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3797515343 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.941176471 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102198496174 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322325091065 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345437525677 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550778758001 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343201677836 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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