In the recommendation drafted by the committee, they are planning to cut the fundings for education and athletic facilities and pour it on to city facilities primarily used by adults. Here the committee is assuming many things before jumping to the conclusion. They are comparing the current birthrate with the 5-year-old trend, they also think that cutting the funds allocated for education programs will help them to fund other facilities, etc.
Birthrate depends on many factors such as the income of the family, issues in family planning or it could be from polygamy, etc. But this birthrate will always keep varying every year because of many factors. Here the committee is comparing the birthrate of a 5-year-old trend with the current one, and it found out to be way less than its predecessor. It could be because of the choice of the parents not to have a child because of their current financial situation or they don't want their children to study in public school as it has fewer facilities when compared to private schools. If the committee is unable to provide such details, then this decision doesn't hold any water.
Moreover, the committee is planning to reduce the funds allocated for education in the coming decade and also planning to do the same for athletic and recreational facilities. We should know that a child who is growing needs to study, playing sports, etc, as it develops all the necessary skills required for the future. This can only be improved by allocating a significant budget in this area. If the funding is reduced, it further deteriorates the quality of the respective fields and may further hinder the thinking of future youths who are on the verge of becoming adults. Again if they don't give adequate proof of why they are doing this, then this decision doesn't hold any value.
In conclusion, before implementing a certain rule, they should always think about the big picture of the situation.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1577 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 447, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...help them to fund other facilities, etc. Birthrate depends on many factors such a...
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Line 3, column 476, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...eir current financial situation or they dont want their children to study in public ...
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Line 3, column 659, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rovide such details, then this decision doesnt hold any water. Moreover, the commit...
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Line 5, column 593, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...verge of becoming adults. Again if they dont give adequate proof of why they are doi...
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Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...they are doing this, then this decision doesnt hold any value. In conclusion, befor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 327.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94189602446 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64982900728 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54128440367 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4318522962 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151417011957 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516011070097 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047549058465 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802455093357 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487582492985 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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