Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best way that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
A controversial issue relating to whether parents should encourage young people to take a part-time job in order to make preparation for further development has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that taking a concurrent post benefits kids when they grow up. From a personal point of view, the above statement is agreeable because of some reasons as below.
To begin with, experiencing different part-time jobs allows teenagers to acquire suitable careers in the future. To be more specific, if youngsters could have the opportunity to contact various part-time positions under the encouragement of their parents, such as bookstore salesman or tutor assistants, they could have a better knowledge of what these occupations involve so that they would find the type of work they appreciate and are good at before they graduate. With all these valuable skills from part-time jobs, it is pretty easy for them to seek satisfactory professionals in a competitive community. Thus, part-time jobs could pave the way for juveniles' occupational choices in prospective time. On the contrary, if the youth did not try diverse classification of professional, which means that they barely comprehend current job requirements and which pursuit is worth striving for entire life. In this case, they would waste a lot of time obtaining promising jobs after graduating from college. Therefore, adolescents may have little realization about future enterprises if they never take a part-time job.
What is more, joining part-time occupations would increase children's understanding of life. In fact, in modern society, working for adults requires lots of time as well as effort and involves dealing with complex social relationships. Under these circumstances, when teenagers experience a period of working time, they would be more aware that doing business is especially tough so that they would pay more attention to school tasks and value every moment in the academy. Moreover, from working involvement, youngsters would have a close emotion with parents who always put great efforts into the work in order to sustain the family. Therefore, young people would not only become thoughtful but also appreciate their current lives. For example, I was once a teaching assistant in a school. During that time, I was supposed to get up early to get to school on time and teach children all day long without spare time to rest. From that work experience, I chose to focus more on my studies and eventually got a master's degree. Hence, it is helpful for kids' growth if they join a concurrent post at school.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, parents present should give more encouragement to their offspring to participate in part-time jobs since all these precious participation would give them abundant selections about future careers and bring them closer to their families.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in fact, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24248927039 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89606486396 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572961373391 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8256561095 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.15 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282891088675 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871280324084 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565736903451 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173239041758 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244331630799 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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