TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
With the continuous development of society, arts and athletics have been playing two significant roles in residents' daily life. There are questions as to whether the government should spend more money on arts or sports, some individuals support the view of spending more money on arts than on athletics. As far as I am concerned, I think athletics deserves more government funding than the arts. To substantiate my point, two reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, distributing more funds to sports such as state-sponsored Olympic teams or games benefits the economic developments and international reputation of a country. To be more specific, more nations are now willing to acquire the right to hold the Olympic Games. In order to hold the Olympic Games successfully, their governments have to invest in building the stadiums, training the coaches as well as advertising their advantages to hold the contests. After a large deal of preparation and publicity, numerous wonderful sport events would attract significant amount of tourists to come to watch those excellent competitions or just take a trip in Olympic cities. Under this circumstance, a host of visitors would pay for the tickets to watch the matches, buy some local souvenirs and travel to renowned places in the country so that they would increase the local economic benefits greater. Besides, if the state could host an unparalleled game combined with distinctive elements, their international popularity and influence would get improved because the Olympic Games brought a profound impression to audiences all over the world. Therefore, spending more money in support of athletics is beneficial to the economy and a nation’s international influence.
What is more, allocating more funds to sports would help strengthen the physical fitness of the whole nation. If a government disburses a lot of expenditures to build new stadiums and facilities that are pretty convenient for citizens to use, both adults and children would be encouraged to exercise. By regularly using these government-built fitness machines, either the body or the spirit of the people have got much relaxation from daily pressures of the occupation or study. In this case, individuals would acquire a better mental state to commit to their careers so that they would achieve a great deal of accomplishments and contribute more to the progress of the community eventually. Hence, the governments should spend more money on physical exercises, both for the health of the residents and the development of the state.
Finally, sports is more popular than arts and therefore deserves more funding. Art such as painting and sculpture is often very abstract and difficult to understand for the ordinary people. Only some people with professional knowledge and interests would appreciate art. On the contrary, sports are pretty common in residents’ life. Almost everyone takes part in various sports activities such as basketball or swimming to keep body and mental health. As a result, governments should spend more money on sports than the arts because athletics could bring benefits to more people.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we may reach the conclusion that the governments are supposed to spend more money to support athletics than the arts because it could drive economic growth to some extent and enhance people's physical fitness, after all，what is good for mankind is eternal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...sidents daily life. There are questions as to whether the government should spend more money ...
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... international reputation of a country. To be more specific, more nations are now ...
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Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...money to support athletics than the arts because it could drive economic growth t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, after all, as to, i think, such as, as a result, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2928.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30434782609 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95608656928 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507246376812 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 902.7 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8090382298 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.304347826 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91304347826 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334237079373 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999703872669 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917483339277 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200033510894 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068075993737 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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