There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better
health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in
the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers
than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only
one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of
physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville
residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest
that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small
communities.
In the article, the author describes a study concerning the relaxed pace of live in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. The reason why the author got this result is that businesses report fewer days of sick by workers in small town than big cities, Leeville has only one physician contrast to five physicians in Masonton, the average age of Leeville residents is higher than big cities. The reasoning of this argument is unconvincing due to several unsubstantiated assumptions which, if proven unwarranted, will seriously challenge the author's recommendation.
First of all, the author believe that workers in the small town of Leeville are reported fewer days of sick than workers in the nearby large cities, hence people who live in small towns possess longer and healthier live style. However, this assumption is potentially problematic. For example, if workers who working in Leeville rarely take time off because they do not want to deduct wages and do not want to affect performance, so they may stick to work even when they are sick. If either of the previous scenarios turns out to be true, then the assumption is disproved and the suggestion is unreasonable.
In addition, the author thinks that people in small town are healthier because there is only one doctor for a thousand people. However, it is unreasonable to assume that. If the town does not have the money to hire more doctors, or if people do not go to the doctor even they are sick, they would take medicine to cure the illness, they may also go to the big city to see doctors since they can offer more careful check.If either of these circumstances proves to be true, then there is reason to doubt the validity of the longevity of the residents in small towns.
Finally, the average age of Leville residents is higher than that of big city residents so that the author come to the conclusion that the people who live in small communities will live longer than nearby cities. The author's argument suffers from a questionable assumption which generalizes the fact that people are living longer in Leeville suggest that they will have a healthier lifestyle. However, the author's argument is unconvincing.If the longer ages of people who live in small towns may come from big cities for the reason that they come to the rural to enjoy a quite life. Then the recommendation may not be enacted.
Consequently, while the author's suggestion appears appealing, the questionable assumption discussed above may deprive it of its feasibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92643678161 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75110086182 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44367816092 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.0 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1080145175 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.866666667 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290679851139 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965626934231 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134248674598 0.0758088955206 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157588626515 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13073823743 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.