Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Young people in the 21st century may constantly complain that the society has forced them to act and feel in a certain way. Some people believe that our society has made too many strict rules on the youth. Others hold the view that there are many freedom and relaxation around young individuals in this society. As far as I am concerned, as the complexity of society increased, more rigid rules are imposed on young generations.
First of all, the youth must have excellent academic background and abilities to join the competition for jobs in modern society. Companies are now hiring people who graduated from one of the country's most prestigious universities and have a wide range of working skills, and from another aspect attended multiple internships. If a student just graduated from college, he is hardly satisfied with so many strict requirements by the company in contemporary society. In this case, the young people could have a hard time striving for live. However, in the past, there were no strict requirements for young people to follow in the requirement of companies. Even fresh graduates without any working experience can be trained for free to help them grow better in the work. From the above discussion, we conclude the idea that with the development of society, the young citizens are suffered from too many strict requests from the societies than people were in the last century.
What is more, family have a higher standard for the young people through their entire life. Nowadays many parents make a strict plan for their children even if in their early age. For example, in China, children have to learn many subjects to be competitive. In addition to knowledge that they must take in school, they also have many extra classes, such as painting, dancing, singing and so on. Parents not only want their children perform well in school, but also want them to have many interests and specialties. When children grow up, their parents require them to find a good job with high salary and great reputation. Even in marriage, parents want their kids to find a suitable family to marry instead of loving each other. Hence, family give young generations a lot of rules that are not free to them at all.
To sum up, in the current society, both the family and the company are proposing more rules to the youth. All of these rules put a lot of pressure on young people. Therefore, I firmly believe that the rules young people need to follow can be labeled as strict.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...th. Others hold the view that there are many freedom and relaxation around young ind...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun freedom seems to be countable; consider using: 'many freedoms'.
Suggestion: many freedoms
...th. Others hold the view that there are many freedom and relaxation around young individuals...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80841121495 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51532988772 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521028037383 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4808007424 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5454545455 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17206206895 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588096941195 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597222956077 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128766557265 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541325216705 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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