Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
One of the benefits of contemporary society is that there are more job opportunities so that young generations have more chances to choose their own future career. Some individuals believe that it is better for children to select the same occupations as their parents. While others hold the view that doing the jobs that are different from parents' jobs is more satisfying. In my opinion, I completely agree with the former view because of reasons as below.
To begin with, parents would provide a large number of working experiences for youth when they are going to do similar jobs with them. Adults who have been working for decades are almost experts in their professional fields because they possessed outstanding job skills as well as good relationships with colleagues. Under this circumstance, if young people pursue identical occupations with their parents after graduation, it is an unexceptionable occasion for them to learn what technical abilities need to master at work or how to get along with colleagues from parents. In this case, they could adapt to the new working environment more quickly under the guidance. In contrast, a young man who does a various job from parents in this)competitive society, great challenges and small improvements may met by him when he just started to work without the help of parents. Therefore, parents play an important role in their children's careers that are equivalent to them.
Moreover, young individuals who are participating in the similar area of enterprises with their parents are more likely to gain success. Nowadays, there are a lot of graduates choose to leave parents to pursue their own business careers in modern cities. Due to the huge competitive environments and complex requirements that work brings, it is almost impossible for youth to completely achieve their goals by themselves in rapidly changing cities. On the contrary, through the work technologies and promotion opportunities offered by parents, those who choose to do the equal jobs with parents are easier to make progresses and attain accomplishments than children who select desired jobs that are different from their parents. Hence, with the assistance from parents, kids would make great achievements in their future life.
Finally, the satisfying occupations that utterly disparate from parents may not be suitable for young people. Some young individuals who are influenced by social trends choose to find current fashionable jobs that are totally diverse from parents. However, these enterprises have many disadvantages including that children may earn a small amount of salary that hardly support their basic life requirements not even to mention the entertainment, and also have few chances to receive great developments and promotions that brighten their future. From the above discussion, there are many drawbacks of the jobs that the youth choose by themselves compared to the jobs that are similar to parents' professions.
To sum up, if children carry on occupations that are parallel with parents, they can not only obtain working experiences but also bear successful fruits. Doing the same jobs as parents may provide more progress for kids than doing the different jobs from parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the same occupations as their parents. While others hold the view that doing the job...
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Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... To begin with, parents would provide a large number of working experiences for youth when they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in contrast, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28793774319 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89433490148 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488326848249 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7137068133 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.428571429 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4761904762 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49098351442 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162955772192 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114733940092 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323680784056 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394623939741 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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