It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
It is critically important that people should seek jobs that make their lives luxurious and happy. Although, some people believe that children should select jobs that are the same as their parents' jobs. I have a different opinion. I would go in the favor of the statement that kids should choose jobs that are different from their parents. I feel this way for two reasons which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, if children prefer to work in a field that is unrelated to their parents then they will have a new experience of a different world. As a result, they can boost their confidence by experiencing innovative things in life. This is best exemplified by my personal experience. When I graduated from university as a pharmacist, I got an opportunity to work in a clinical setting where I got a chance to have interactions with different patients which I always dreamt of. I gained a variety of knowledge that was so interesting for me. Even though my parents wanted me to study business management so that I could run my family business. If I had not studied pharmacy then I would not be able to learn unique patterns of education.
Secondly, when the kids will work in a field that is attractive to them and shows more interest towards it then it will enhance their chances to become a successful person. In contrast, if children will pick a profession of their parents that is not fascinating then they cannot achieve success in their careers. For instance, about ten years ago, my uncle forced my cousin to become a lawyer as his both parents were lawyers. He studied law and became a lawyer. But when he started working professionally, he was unable to become a famous lawyer as he had no passion for that specific field. If my cousin had not chosen the field of law then he would not have been unsuccessful in his professional life.
In conclusion, I have a firm belief that doing a job that is unsimilar to parents' jobs will be beneficial. This will not only improve the children's ability to learn new aspects but also opens the gates of success and improvement in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65240641711 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73865194497 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510695187166 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5404427702 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302181292267 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902935840492 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10619136351 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202007545624 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121508439273 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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