Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents jobs Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Children are like to imitate the most about their parents because after born they are passing their infantile time with them. Parents influence us in many ways from staring to expressing, almost everything what we do intentionally or unintentionally? According to the given prompt children should follow their parent’s occupation rather then choosing different occupation- someone would agree, others would not. In my view, we should follow our own choice for greater benefits for the following two important reason.

The main reason is that diversify often benefits our human civilization. The world is full of heterogeneous place where, everyone is different from their color to choice. As, people are different so, their different occupation helps to make the world in a complete place. For example, I was born and raised a wealthy family, where my parents both are working in a bank. From the very early of my understanding, I knew the prosaic duties of going to the bank job. So, I decide to focus on a broader job, where, I am unbounded to oblige someone order. Then, finally I became a researcher and I am now doing research on various things about our human life and for me life is more fascinating as I found everyday something new and different than previous day. As you can see that, choosing a different career make life more diversified and satisfied.

Another reason is that we have to think outside of the box to make an imprint for future generation. The world is now more developed and technologically advanced than any other time. What world we got was not same before, it came for our ancestors cumulative efforts. They helped our gene evolutiuon, so, we are now more advanced in thinking. For instance, when I was in my graduate time, I was attending a conference on a great physicist, actually it was a biography on Edison. That biography changed my career view, as early life Edison was a school teacher then one day he became interested to work with science. Later, he became a renowned scientist by changing his occupation. This experience taught me that, being pliable to change the career would cause a greater good for our human civilization alike Edison.

In sum, the choosing parent’s path in career decision is somewhat ready to make but, in long run these decisions will not bring enough soothe to an unquenchable mind. Taking own decision will not only diversified our world but also pave a way for our progeny. So, we should let our children free on their occupation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...follow their parent’s occupation rather then choosing different occupation- someone ...
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Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'orders'.
Suggestion: orders
...where, I am unbounded to oblige someone order. Then, finally I became a researcher an...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 738, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...nd everyday something new and different than previous day. As you can see that, choo...
^^^^
Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'diversify'
Suggestion: diversify
...mind. Taking own decision will not only diversified our world but also pave a way for our p...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, so, then, for example, for instance, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90610328638 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77867251785 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556338028169 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3085240623 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8695652174 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243728582535 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642687622295 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469796065913 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148990309221 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08187254036 0.0645574589148 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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