Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Family is an important and essential part in your life whether we support extended and nuclear family is not a big deal. Family is a place where we are grown to become a compete man and it also teach us how to survive in this uncertain world. Joint family is less good now than in the before. It is quite possible someone would support nuclear family by delineating many facts and reasons. But, my view is to champion the older and comprehensive family for the following two important reason.
The main reason is that extended family beget to buttress family relationship. In a joint family where, every family members are get the chance to know each other better. By passing a long time in the same family that will strengthen family bond. For example, in the city of Shibchr an upazilla of Bangladesh I was born in a joint family. In my family we were 10 members including my father, mother, brother, sister, uncle, aunt, nephew, cousins, grandma, and grandparents. In the time of occasion such as Eid, we were feeling unbounded joy. Literally, we had not enough to felt lonely and isolated. All the time, we were in a festive mood. During special visit of our relatives visit, we were in full festive mood. As you can see that, extended family means extended joy and many ways to celebrate the joy, love and warmth.
Another reason is that, comprehensive family is the way to hold the power. In early time, the power lies only the number of people of your family. The more people in your family, the more power you have. To be more specific, as I was raised in a joint family, we have had controlling power to the village. During confliction and natural disaster we were gone to compromise and help other family members. Specifically, during the cyclone Sidor attacked our south part of Bangladesh. We had formed a social group in order to help the afflicted families. Most of the members of our group were came from my family. As a result, we had not faced any complications and able to hold the organization unity. This experience taught me that, if we are united together nobody will able to harm and we will able to take any social reformation approach by applying power.
In conclusion, although someone would provide different vies in order to support the nuclear family but in long run these approaches will not sustain. Not only, joint family helps to build a good bond among family members but also it will throw the chance to held power and social activities. So, we should build our previous extended family version in lieu of nuclear and isolated family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...is a place where we are grown to become a compete man and it also teach us how to survive...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'teaches'?
Suggestion: teaches
...own to become a compete man and it also teach us how to survive in this uncertain wor...
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Line 5, column 591, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
.... Most of the members of our group were came from my family. As a result, we had not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68502202643 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51107987391 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497797356828 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9738619127 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9642857143 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.60714285714 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162927567123 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510034846212 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532818128108 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116416046802 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632372674625 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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