No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of the importance of the relations between family members. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select that relationships with extended family these days are less essential in comparison with the past. It is my firm belief everyone should maintain his relations with his family, but with this massive pressure on individuals they cannot keep bonds for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, rapid development in each one's life keeps him busy with his personal issues, so people cannot stay in communication because of these matters. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. Ten years, when my family and I lived in a village, our neighbors were my grandparents and my uncles, so we meet them every day to speak about our daily activities or our problems. Subsequently, after moving to a big city we were always busy with our new life like work and university, so the connection with our family declined. On top of that, nowadays everyone cares about his passion only without following and focusing on others. If I had stayed in my last home, I would have highly relations with my family.
Secondly, the new generations' minds are less interested in keeping relations with other family members. Drawing from my own experience. Now, I still make some connections with my aunts and uncles, but my brother, who has eleven years old, did not make interaction with our family, this is because he is always busy playing computer games and dealing with his friends. However, this new generation has odd concepts and beliefs about the family bond. Nevertheless, my father invited his sisters to a dinner every month, as a way of keeping this connection, but with days how knows that will change.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that these days relations are less paramount. This is because people have extra responsibilities and ideas change with time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'is eleven years old'.
Suggestion: is eleven years old
...y aunts and uncles, but my brother, who has eleven years old, did not make interaction with our fami...
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Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: HAVE_A_BREAKFAST[2]
Message: When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: 'to dinner'.
Suggestion: to dinner
...rtheless, my father invited his sisters to a dinner every month, as a way of keeping this c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92219020173 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74077794269 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57060518732 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2272057527 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153198668441 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555471815531 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458150529678 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101720845499 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370653477892 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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