Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing a career is a very crucial decision in anyone's life. Every individual must make sure while selecting a job what their future holds with it. There is no shortage of opinions that it is better for children to choose a job that is very different from their parents. It may help them to explore their inner talent and boost their confidence. I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that children should choose similar jobs as their parents. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons in support of my belief.
First and foremost, when children choose the same career as their parents it helps them to kick start their career in a better way. Moreover, parents can share a sea of knowledge with them as they have a first hand experience. They know the insight of the job. However, children selecting a different job than their parents may not have any personal experience. To exemplify, my best friend chose to become a cardiologist as her father was also a renowned cardiologist of his time. This helps her in a lot of ways because he guides her at every step like in preparing her assignments, in selecting the best salary package and facilities by the employer. Thus, this instance illustrates that if she had not chosen the similar field as of his father she may not be that successful in a short span of time.
Secondly, having a job in the same field as a parent may help children to make connections and have better opportunities. To add on, many of the government jobs offer children benefits. On the contrary, children having jobs in fields other than their parents have to struggle a lot as they do not have proper information on how to approach the officials in a professional way. This can be best explained by my own personal experience, when I was about to graduate from law school I applied for my internship in a renowned law firm. By the time I receive my degree I am already doing my practice unlike my other peers who are searching for it. Therefore, if my parents had not guided me to apply for an internship earlier I might not be able to get such an amazing opportunity.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is better for children to choose a similar job as their parents as it may give a good kickstart to their career and also they get better job opportunities as they have good connections .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58726415094 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69448648901 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466981132075 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5966321164 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.619047619 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405921132838 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136239792651 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116962376893 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291792916146 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902153060469 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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