Topic (TPO 26)-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
Career choice has always been a crucial and vital concern for younger generation because if they choose their career correctly, they will be able to build a bright future for themselves. Some people are amenable to the idea that children should continue their parents' jobs or at least, choose jobs which are similar to their parents'. On the contrary, others hold the view that the younger generation should choose a job which they are talented for and interested in, even if it is not similar to their parents' career. This subject has always brought about heated debates. In my view, the two reasons - children's talents and interests plus choosing a job based on the current need of market and society - can be used to support the idea that children do not necessarily need to choose jobs which are similar to their parents' jobs.
The first reason which is the most important from my point of view is that successful people are the ones who choose their job based on their talents, skills, and interests. If someone starts a career from nothing, he/she can be successful in that field if they are interested and skillful in it and never give up working. On the other hand, if children choose a job similar to their parents' while they do not have interest in doing it, this would lead to a very dangerous situation in which the children would become hopeless and do not have enough motivation to work hard and reach the goals they set in their mind.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that having a job background does not necessarily lead to success. In the other words, working background cannot be counted as an indicator to determine whether a person will be successful or not. I believe one of the main measures which should be considered for measuring success is whether the job is in demand in the society or not. If so, that job benefits from high potential of rapid expansion and development. The reason for this is that when the demand for that specific job is high, it guarantees the development/progress and expansion/growth of that field in the future, which leads to economic benefits. Conversely, if you choose a job based on your parents' career without considering the current needs of the society, it does not necessarily guarantee a successful job career because I may not the one your society is really much in need of
To wrap up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it would be better and logical that children choose their future job based on their talents and interests. In addition, they should take the demand of the society into consideration because this can guarantee the success of the job, at least, in the short-term future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, if, may, really, so, while, at least, in addition, in my view, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77611940299 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66966881733 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.595201304 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.333333333 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2666666667 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409698912947 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161027570664 0.076458572812 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124046314834 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283242978216 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725389392057 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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