Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
It is widely accepted that people should acquire satisfying jobs to have secure economic and build better future for themselves and their family members. But is it always going to happen the same way for every one? In this regard, some people are amenable to the idea that people should take the job whenever if they have been suggested for, without considering how satisfying that job would be. On the other hand, others hold the view that people should not take any kinds of job and it is better to wait for a better one. In my view, I think have the chance to get a secure job, he/she must accept it and do not wait until one day some one offer him/her a better job. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to aptly explained in the following.
The first reason which is the most important in my opinion is that people take jobs to fulfill expectations, family needs and demands. Thus, if some one has been offered for taking a job, that person should be not ambitious and reject the offer because the job benefits does not satisfy his/her demands and expectations. If such thing happens, he/she will lose a period of time in which that person must have worked to make money. It would be much better to accept the job offer ant simultaneously, search for better jobs opportunities which has better advantages in contrast with the current job that he/she owns it.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that for getting more satisfying jobs, you need to have a strong resume which consists of years of experience in that specific field plus skills and enough knowledge which is required to do the job perfectly. As a result, people usually can not get their ideal job or at least, more satisfying job, in their early years of working. They need to work hard for years to be an expert in that major, expand their network with elites of that field, and improve their skills which are associated with the job in order to be known between businesses and managers of that specific field to have the chance to be offered a much more satisfying job than the current one.
To wrap up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it is much better people get a secure job and start working. While working, improve their skills, obtain more experience, and if the benefits of their current job does not meet their expectations, search for a job which is more satisfying to them. The point is, never ignore opportunities, may be it is going to be last one. Don not waste it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...ons, family needs and demands. Thus, if some one has been offered for taking a job, that...
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Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... such thing happens, he/she will lose a period of time in which that person must have worked t...
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Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve their skills, obtain more experience, and if the benefits of their current job...
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Line 7, column 366, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...e point is, never ignore opportunities, may be it is going to be last one. Don not was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, thus, while, at least, i think, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58901098901 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41979319496 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463736263736 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5773832946 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.823529412 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424218642822 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144764589409 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922187986508 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278983901568 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562599371765 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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