Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Many people in the world think that children should follow their parents and have the same field in their lives, personally, I believe that children should have different jobs than their parents, is better choice for them. There are several reasons I feel this way. I will explore them in the following essay.
First compelling reason corroborating my stance on this subject that children will have new opportunities to excel in future will engendered myriad of advantages. When they choose a different field, they will surely have new direction to pursue their career. My personal experience will drive this concept home. Few year back, I was in school, I wanted to be a doctor. Although, my parent was not from medical profession. I worked hard; I choose medical subjects. Moreover, I got excellent results that helped me to get scholarship. I went to medical college and passed my all exams with excellent marks. Finally, I became a doctor. Had I not changed my field, I would never have been a doctor in my life.
Furthermore, children can change their field from their parents and can have better lifestyle. Nowadays there are a lot of new fields, new generation can explore and have new career. For instance, my sister was interested in make-up art. Hence, she started making some videos and shared on his YouTube channel. Consequently, she got famous in few days. After some months, she got a call from well-known company, they offered her a highly paid job. She got that job and started earning. She is best makeup artist now. Additionally, she also visits other countries. If she had not chosen a new profession, she would not have been able to live this lifestyle.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that having different profession from your parents has advantages. You can kill two birds with one stone You can have better career and best lifestyle
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91139240506 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62590352676 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569620253165 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0621254812 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.08 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.64 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229602283308 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549423377391 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743614729793 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156123886867 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746815005048 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.31 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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