After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
A controversial issue relating to whether students should take a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that it is important for students to take a year off to join work or visit another country after completing high school. From a personal point of view, the above statement is agreeable for some reasons as below.
To begin with, experiencing different kinds of occupation or having a tour would make young teenagers more clear about which career suits them to pursue all their life. To be more specific, nowadays a number of young people barely understand what the development of the society is like and which profession is worth them to follow in the future. In this case, if they could have some time to try diverse works in the community and take a journey to their desired places after graduating from high school, youngsters would possess a deeper recognition and experience of contemporary society and thus make a decision about their major in college. As a result of first-hand participation, the youth would pay attention to their careers. On the contrary, if juveniles directly join the college and never have a chance to undergo real society life, they may find that they are not suitable for the specialty since the domain may be chosen by their parents or tutors rather than their own knowledge. Therefore, it is absolutely necessary for adolescents to undergo periodic time to take a business or travel before they enter a university.
What is more, pupils would learn that liveliness is full of hardship and be willing to devote more energy and time to study if they could participate in a profession and take a tour to additional region after finishing high school. It is widely acknowledged that modern children have put in most of their energy to study and spend a lot of time on campus so that they have few opportunities to sense life outside the school. Contrary to always staying at institution, if the youth could go through social activities, they may realize that every penny is hard won and their present life is deserving to be cherished. Thus, they would take their research more seriously and receive more accomplishments in the future. In contrast, without undergoing growth in public, youngsters would consider that liveliness is always so comfortable even if they graduate from university so that they may waste plenty of valuable study hours. However, it would be a tough moment for them when they are trying to find a job in a competitive society. Therefore, every kid should comprehend the real world in advance and put much of their power into the academic area.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, adolescents should spend at least a year off to take an enterprise or journey before they start learning at a college because those treasured acquaintances would let them realize the befitting domain for them and they would also value campus life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1011, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...n their own knowledge. Therefore, it is absolutely necessary for adolescents to undergo periodic tim...
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Line 3, column 586, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...enny is hard won and their present life is deserving to be cherished. Thus, they would take ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, at least, in contrast, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.880859375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7121804326 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498046875 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1148572653 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1176470588 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34689265386 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109335008848 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129301688765 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258563563634 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153461193074 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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