The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nations progress is determined by the way it contributes to the welfare of its own people, progress in scientific, cultural, arts, infrastructure and economy; facilitate the common people to live a better life. Although, achievement of a nation is led by the great people who lead the society in all fields example freedom fighters, scientist, artist, and politicians. The populace and the common people are the true reflectors of the great nation and contribute to the society considerably; it is their quality of life, which is taken into account of the true Great nation and not the groundbreaking revelation
At first, scientist, politicians and rulers are the ones who set the directions for the common people. Kepler, was a solo contributor to the field of scientific research and made some ground breaking revelations and contributed to the society. Subverting the common belief Kepler was able to bring in the theory of sun, as the center of the solar system, debunking the previous notion of Ptolemaic- earth being the center of universe. Such Individual achievements truly represents the nation’s importance and greatness, and emerge as icon for the rest of the world.
However, majority of the representation of greatness in a nation are the true common people. What is the use of the new invention of technology by an individual who just serves the discovery to the rest of the world? How will that help public in their day-to-day life? Mere discovering a distant star in the Cosmos by scientist or the astronomers landing on Moon will never help solve the social problem, which the common people face in the country. India launched Chandrayaan 1 lately investing billions of dollars, had the money used for the general welfare of the poor by some scheme, we would have utilized the money for the true progress of the nation, by eradicating the poverty and making and providing the education for poor children who cannot afford education.
In sum, individual achievements do reflect the nation’s progress, but the true representations of the nation’s success are the common people, and the quality of their life that tells the nations development and greatness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 612, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on and not the groundbreaking revelation At first, scientist, politicians and rul...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
... common people. What is the use of the new invention of technology by an individual who just...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...he quality of their life that tells the nations development and greatness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 33.0505617978 27% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12044817927 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95226667296 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535014005602 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.9542628333 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.333333333 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177036101454 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629369552243 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528355313937 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107852133309 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601136019004 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.