In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Great achievements in life come by strong determination and persistence in the efforts and a small luck which make the desired results possible and will need to success. The prompt says that the strong achievements in the past are the only ones that contribute to our goals, I do partially agree to the stance that the past achievements in the same field help boost our confidence to achieve even greater results, however, I completely disagree that they are the only ones that will help and contribute to our endeavor. Had the past achievements were the only factors, then those past achievements would inturn be influenced by the previous past achievements and therefore , this recursion would continue until there is the precedence set by the individual itself. Individual experts in the relevant field we desire to achieve are also the influencing factors which help us in the right direction and reach tour destiny.
At first, it’s important to note that perseverance and relentless efforts are the key factors for anything we try to achieve in our life. The famous cricketer, Sachin Tendulkar, having world class track record set an exceptional example for the same. Despite hailing from the poor family, his dream to become a best batsman was unhindered. With ease he was able to achieve Ranji trophy, but failed to enter the International cricket team for atleast. Taking his failed attempts as accolades and stepping stoe to success, he was able to attempt it for the 36th time and he was selected. Tremendous amount of focus and consistence in practice contributed to his success. Its imperative to have the ‘never give up’ attitude to achieve things what we deserve and desire.
Secondly, motivation from the expert in the concerned field plays important role. Take example of Jack Pollack, his aim was to be a great canvas painter in the Roman era. He was inspired and motivated by the Rafael Giovven, who had dominated the canvas sculptures in the 18th century. Pollack , went on to seek guidance from Rafael to throw the canvas art out of the window and went few steps ahead to reach the acme , by producing phenomenal art and set the precedence for the rest in the field.
In sum, its not the past achievements that help contribute to the endeavor, but it’s the continuous efforts, and perseverance that help us achieve our dreams. We should always aspire to acquire the desire we admire, if we perspire, never retire, rather refire to acquire the desire which we admire.
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...previous past achievements and therefore , this recursion would continue until the...
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...ction and reach tour destiny. At first, it’s important to note that perseverance...
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...est batsman was unhindered. With ease he was able to achieve Ranji trophy, but f...
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...6th time and he was selected. Tremendous amount of focus and consistence in pract...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94523809524 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70757523964 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538095238095 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0471610086 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.176470588 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202576499941 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572212520686 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544211393345 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110531909505 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865488458278 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.