Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The performance of the students depends on lot of factors right from the innate ability to learn the factors that influence the person learning environment, where the child has been brought up, culture and the family background . The prompt says that the students’ academic performance should be the factor taken into consideration for their appraisals and promotion. I completely disagree with it as there are numerous factors that decide the success and performance of students.
Firstly, considering the fact that teachers are doing their best to teach the students, going to their level of understanding and explaining things that is more easily understood, however few students continue to fail in exam. Is that the fault of the teacher who has doing her job well? Will the evaluation take into account the efforts teacher has put to bring things to better understating level? No, of course not. For instance a reputed school in Bangalore named Bishop Cotton School, well known for the reputed teachers, few of them even achieved Ph.D. in their subject, put tremendous efforts and make sure that all students maintain consistent results across all subject and every semester. However, we still see many students still fail and had to repeat the class. In this circumstances, teacher should not be rated low. It could be that those students may have some other problem and that is why they are not performing well. It might also be that case that the surroundings in which they have brought in, is not letting them to study. Or it could be that the child itself has limited innate quality to grasp things.
Secondly, there are students who have flourish with flying colors in their pursuit of education without any teacher teaching nicely, in this context should be teacher highly rated? . Few students are extremely intelligent by birth and do not require any guidance, take for example the precocious child Nicolas Tesla. He never had a teacher who could give him quality education in suburbs of France, teaches never cared about the students much, still we saw Nicolas Tesla became a great scientist by inventing electricity .Therefore the success or the failure of students will never tell the merits of the teacher and they should not be accessed taking this factor.
However, some might argue that without teachers and proper guidance students cannot learn and explore the area of interest and do better in life and hence the success of students are the important factor to access the merits of teachers appraisal. But, the success of the student is more of the inner motivation to find the things that are interesting them and not on the external. Therefore, teachers performance should not be evaluated completely on the performance, but take into consideration of various factors as well like students background , family literacy rate etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08085106383 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61340029973 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512765957447 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.7031425126 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.684210526 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216304791224 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706306467116 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434982067163 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137996001087 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013995337844 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.