Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Innate qualities of an individual is of higher importance when it comes to choosing a career. A person who choose the job as his/her career based on the talent they possess is less likely to suffer in their career growth later in life as they will what they do and not be compelled to do what they do not like. I do agree with the prompt that we should decide the career and study fields based on the talent we have ,rather than evaluating the job market and then fit our interest in the subject which is on demand in the market. Doing the later could have some momentarily gain, but in the long run they will suffer as they are forced to work in the field which least correlates with their talent and natural interest.
Firstly, its imperative for a person to identify the talent he/she possess, adapt the course of study in the initial days of the career decision making and work through it to make it as their profession , disregard of the market scenario and technology that is in boon. For example, a student having keen interest in arts and history is ought to have selected a graduation course on Arts rather than leaning towards Statics and machine learning with is in boom currently. He might however with a high payed job, but as the time progresses he will realize that he was made to fit a job irrelevant of his talent. He may later has to compromising as his job would be hectic and he may not be able to enjoy the field of study and contribute much because that’s not what he is made for. Such people are in all likelihood are not know to have made considerable progress because they work against their own talent. Therefore, choosing the career that well suits a individual talent rather that the market is a pivotal for greater success.
Secondly, market changes demands with regards to field of technology. Today we see software engineering and machine learning technology that is in boom and tomorrow it will be something else related to Astronomy, or Popular arts etc. The demands of market is transitory and hence we do not have to completely follow the market while choosing the field of study and rely on our natural talent and field of interest. Take for example civil engineering, which had a boob on 1990’s in India as there was more need of infrastructure development and today we least see that civil engineers are in demand, ostensibly we cannot say that civil engineers won’t make their livelihood by being in the profession, but its less in demand compared to other field of engineering. Had a person chosen civil engineering in 1990’s despite having talent in statistics (which is in demand today due to machine learning) he would have suffered in his professional career and would also have a sense of regret because he didn’t choose statistics. Therefore it’s better to build up the career based on the quality and not rely on the short term demands of the market.
In sum, choosing the career based on the qualities and inner talent is the right way to choose the career and adhering to it in our professional life is necessary rather that depending on the contemporary demands of the market that would certainly be changing in the coming years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... it comes to choosing a career. A person who choose the job as his/her career bas...
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...study fields based on the talent we have ,rather than evaluating the job market an...
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...as they are forced to work in the field which least correlates with their talent and natura...
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... a person to identify the talent he/she possess, adapt the course of study in the initi...
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...ll realize that he was made to fit a job irrelevant of his talent. He may later h...
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...of infrastructure development and today we least see that civil engineers are in demand,...
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...atistics which is in demand today due to machine learning he would have suffered ...
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...ort term demands of the market. In sum, choosing the career based on the qualiti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 565.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65663716814 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5435517752 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428318584071 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 822.6 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.2249465668 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.764705882 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2352941176 23.4991977007 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203110536066 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735325390214 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508113328242 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123059719699 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439454259384 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.