The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Given that any society can not exist without its member, the greatness of a society should be fundamentally determined by the levels of the welfare of the members. however, some people may argue that welfare as an abstract term is almost impossible to properly evaluate. According to their opinion, it is excessively difficult to estimate levels of welfare, and even if evaluations are made, the results can not be reliable, because they vary depending on methods of research.
Therefore, some people may believe a better indicator of the greatness of the nation is the achievements of a few outstanding figures from society. they may think the achievements of politicians, artists, athletes and scientists are comparatively easily and objectively estimated. For example, any salient successes of athletes can be easily evaluated by the numbers of winning in competitions. And usually, people have a huge interest in these results. scientists' achievements are also objectively recorded and evaluated by the number of papers and the degree of contribution to their fields. Each field has its widely accepted way to evaluate these factors. Although the achievements of scientists also frequently fail to attract people's interest, at least people can enjoy the developments based on their scientistic outcomes. As we have seen above, the achievements of a few members who have outstanding ability can be estimated through reliable ways and have practical effects on the others of society. however, it seems that the general welfare of the people can not relish these advantages.
even though the level of welfare is a kind of thing difficult to objectively grasped, it is not impossible to be known at least indirectly. In fact, diverse factors are being used to estimate the level of welfare. For example, economic condition, medical facilities, expected longevity are widely accepted as a factor to show the welfare of the nation. Furthermore, many research institutes are reporting the levels of societies using a variety of methods. if the reports secure efficient reliability, there are enough reasons to refer to the results. Moreover, people have more interest in the level of welfare of a nation than any other achievements made by a few people. because the welfare of a nation is directly their issue. For example, in 2020 when coronavirus attacked the whole world, people concerned mainly on the level of a medical system which is immediately linked to their health, which is one of the important factors of welfare. The emergency had shown that people fundamentally more concerned about their welfare than sports games, science, or even politics.
To sum up, some people may disagree that the welfare of people should be the most important indicator of greatness based on the idea that the welfare can not be reliable sources, and that people do less concern the welfare than salient achievement. however, it is not true. the welfare can be known with enough objectivity and people fundamentally think welfare more important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, at least, for example, in fact, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2772073922 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93691498036 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462012320329 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5717598198 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.083333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2916666667 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194979831834 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566243388074 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449120641711 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12319138624 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319863577062 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.