In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl

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In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

The argument discusses about a city whose residents, as per the mentioned survey, are fond of water sports. And the author therefore, insists on development around the Mason river, which flows through the city, to facilitate citizens with the reverside recreational activities within thier city. The intent is justifiable but there are evident assumptions in the proposal for a greater proportion of the city's budget to develop these facilities. Firstly, the question is on the qulaity of survey. There are no details mentioned regarding the identity and the survey credibility mentioned. We need to know, what previous accomplishments this survey has achieved by suggesting some development for a city based on the conclusion their survey results has claimed. Also, the details regarding the count or type of people used for conducting this survey. We need to sure with these details before coming to the conclusion, that the people of this city actually desire this development in their city. Secondly, there is an assumption if they develop the local river, the people who have shown interest in the water sports are likely to plan their activities for this river as well. It can be the case, those people perform these activities when they are on vacations or holiday trips. And, since people most likely plan vacations to places other than their city, the recreational plan will not attract their intended audience. Thirdly, state has recently announced cleaning up of the Mason river but there is no mention of the duration and upto what time they have claimed to complete the cleaning. It's important to understand the details of the announcement, as accordingly planning for recreational activities can be conducted. It can be the case, the timelines and the procedures involved in the state's plan would not even allow city to start recreational development alongside. So, it doesn't make sense to pull extra budget for recreational development this year atleast.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...reational development alongside. So, it doesnt make sense to pull extra budget for rec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19496855346 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81276959557 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540880503145 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.811796603 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.133333333 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.21951772744 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241964780274 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807350764669 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387670149348 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241964780274 0.150359130593 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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