Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Teachers are of cardinal importance to any society and a society can never develop beyond the capacity or level of sophiscation of its teachers since these are the people that instill values into the populace. Therefore, discussion of the factor on which the renumeration of teachers should be based in of importance and I believe that teachers’ salary payment should not be made solely on the academic performance of their students due to the fact that there are a lot of factors that affect the academic performance of students apart from the teachers’ performances and some other cogent reasons.
Firstly, there are a lot of factors, including environment, parent’s educational level, and student’s interest, that define the performance of a student academically. Various researches have shown that pupils who have well educated and dedicated parents tend to do better than those with illiterate parents because these parents would be able to help the student with his/her assignments and weak areas. Such literate parents also tend to appreciate the value of education more thereby investing as much as they can into it. Another important factor is the environment (both in school and at home). The environment a pupil is has a very strong impact on the academic development of such student. A tudent who is almost always in very loud environment might find it difficult to have time to read and this would definitely affect such student. Therefore, due to the fact that these factors can also impact the performance of a student, it would be unfair to base the renumeration of teachers on the academic performance of the students.
Secondly, although some might argue that student’s output is a very good factor to base the salary of a teacher on because it can be easily determined, such decision might have negative impact on the students because the teachers might just start grading the students with simple questions that the students are supposed to know in a bid to increase their own salary. This in turn hobbles the academic development of such child. Since what we are after is the development of the students, not an easy way out, I believe the salaries of teachers should be based on more holistic factors.
In conclusion, academic excellence should not be the only expectation from students. Students are expected to possess moral and social uprightness to. So, basing teachers’ salaries on academics alone is tantamount to neglecting other parts of education. In conclusion, due to the fact that several factors affect the academic importance of students and the fact that teacgers may start grading the students favourably that how they have actually performed in the academics, it is not advisable to follow the recommendation that teachers should be paid salaries that are commensurate with their students academic output.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, apart from, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15053763441 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.876577018 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45376344086 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.769719773 60.3974514979 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.6875 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0625 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266230114634 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932028776386 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733439438239 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19240176923 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515078884835 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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