Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance
Man should be awarded with incentives based on efforts that one puts on certain work not solely on the basis of the result that is achieved, as the result may depend on several factors that are out of one’s control. One may argue that good amount of effort is likely to get a favourable outcome. However, rewarding someone on the basis of these outcomes would not be just especially when outcome doesn’t reflect the effort. So, in my view it is not plausible to award salaries to the teacher based on the performances of their student.
Student’s performance doesn’t always reflect the effort made by teacher as learning is the process where both learner and the teacher should contribute an equal effort to have a satisfactory outcome. While teacher may put his best efforts to give proper learning environment to students, the students may neglect their duty as learner resulting in poor result. Then would it be plausible to punish teachers for the negligence of their students? Obviously not.
For instance, I studied in one of the government schools of my town. The local government there provided the school with best teachers selected through a thorough examination. In addition, my school had a well equipped library with a good computer facility. Despite such a good teaching-learning environment our school had a poor performance in the national level examination. The major reason for this was that the parents were reluctant to send their children to school because they would help them in household chores. So, if the teachers in my school were paid on the basis of the student’s result how unfair would it be for them.
Finally, proponents of above argument might say that rewarding salaries on the basis of the student’s outcome makes teachers more diligent and teaching-learning environment more favourable. However, there are many such instances in the school when teachers have punished children beyond limits just to force students to study and get a good result for the teacher’s reputation. If a teacher can go this far just to secure his reputation, how far can he/she go when one has an economic stake in the result? So, it is never good to link economic incentive with the result of students if we are to have a good teaching-learning environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...al government there provided the school with best teachers selected through a thorough ex...
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Line 7, column 468, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...cure his reputation, how far can he/she go when one has an economic stake in the r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, in addition, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08638743455 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01810550328 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484293193717 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.169595232 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.294117647 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215745735859 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777146211433 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846759605746 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147950044915 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055658417418 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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