Teachers salaries should be based on their students academic performance Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to address the most compelling reaso | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The prompts says that teachers' wages should be determined based on their students' performance. I totally disagree with this prompt, as it is unfair approach to be the criteria in measuring the teachers' salaries, for three reasons.
First, not all students deal with the school from the same perspective. Students have different priorites; some of them could be committe twords the school, while the others don't. For example, if the school will define the teachers' wages based on the students' performance, they should take into their account absence factor; as the performance of the absent students could be negatively affected. This absence factor doesn't belong to the teachers' performance or to their effort. Thus, if their salaries will proportionally affected with the number of absences, that means it will be reduced based on unjstice criterian. Therefore, teachers' efferot should be evaluated separately regardless the students' performance.
Secondly, there are plenty of circumstances could affect the student's academic level during the study, and if the teacher's salary become reflection to these circumstances, it means that teacher's will not well-paid for ever. For example, we know that not all the students have the same circumstance which affect the pupils' presence and to follow the school pace. if there a teacher who is teaching a class has three or more from the students who are working besides the school, what if their circumstance affected their performace in school, so, why the teacher wage reflects such a poor performance regardless their efforts with the rest of class.
Thirdly, another factor has a great effect on the student's performance, which is the students' preference. Not all the students will have the same preference towards the subjects. For instance, if there are 10 out of 30 students don't like History, why shloud the History teacher afford their poor performance inn his subject although he or she are doing their best in class. For sure, this apporach will let teachers feel disappointed and as time passed, they will lose their passion to enhance the teaching skills, as they are been asked to reach unachievable goal.
In conclusion, teachers' salaries should be evaluated based on their performance not the students' performance; as the students' performance could be negatively affected by several factors not belong to the teacher at all, and in this case if their wages reduced or deducted based on such unfair evaluation, thery will not keen to do their best to achieve the best results in the class.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19660194175 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7501392436 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466019417476 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.8118941067 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8125 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277598389736 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112192241476 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553721352409 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188998590055 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456295701883 0.0667264976115 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments