Students are more influenced by their teacher than by their friends
The prompt says that students are likely be affected by their teachers more than their friends. However, I disagree with the prompt's statement for two reasons. First, students see themselves as rivals, which is not the case with their teachers as they see them supervisors. Second, each student has interests which are compatible with the friends more than with the teachers. I will go deeply through each reason in the following essay.
To begin, students are usually at the same age; and thus, they look at each other as competitors. This is best demonstrated by personal experience. Last year, My cousin querrled with his brother to buy a high-brand cell phone, which is extremely expensive, and it doesn't suitable for their expenditures. However, my cousin insisted to buy it, although non of his teacher has that a costy phone. My cousin's importune was for his feeling of competition with his friends as they all have that phone. Students always in a race, who will buy this first; or who will be admired and find appealing by this girl. Therefore, classmates influence each other more than be affected by their teachers.
Second, because students have the same interests such as going have fun and eating, and traveling form time to time. Usually, they have the same life's pattern. For instance, if one has his car, the rest of group will be the same, even if that doesn't affordable for his family. Yet, to share the interests, every one will seek to have what the other has. Upon my cousin example, one day he did an accident with his mothers' car. As time passed, we realized that accident didn't by him, rather by his friend, who was training how to drive as his friends did. Thus, the relationship between the classmate is more significant than their relationship with their teachers.
To sum up, I am in opinion that teachers have no effect on the students. This because they are not at the same age of the students, and have not the same interests. On the other hand, the students influence each other to cope with the rest interests to extent that they do unaffordable things that burden their families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78746594005 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52935310429 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50408719346 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0954541904 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8636363636 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6818181818 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325616235681 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983559906938 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135412340446 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222633584054 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100407956092 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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