Pemchint Use (Alternate Explanation)
Archaeologists have long thought that an artifact called the pemchint was used by Dodecan people solely as a musical instrument. Pemchints consist of hollowed pieces of bone, shell, or wood that are tied together with long straps. When whirled in the air, the pemchints create pleasant tones. Until recently, pemchints were found only at locations known to be used for Dodecan rituals and celebrations. Additionally, they were always excavated in proximity to other musical artifacts. Recently, however, a pemchint was found along with Dodecan hunters’ tools located miles from the nearest known Dodecan
settlement, while no other music-related objects were found in the area. Clearly, then, the pemchint was used by Dodecan hunters, who most probably used the sounds to repel dangerous wildlife.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
This argument is rife of holes and unwarranted explanations about using pemchint tool. The argument says that tools was well-known for its using in Dodecan people's rituals and celebrations. However recently they found it with Dodecan's hunters. The author should take into his acount more than expalantions to construe why this instrument has been found with hunters. There are two more explanations could be the reason for this instrument's existence with the hunters.
Firstly, the agrument has been stated that instrument, Dodecan's people accustomed to use it in their rituals and celebrations, so, why the author takes this extreme explanation for the existence of this instrument with hunter, and says that they use it for thwarting dangerous wildlife. There are prospected other reasons, for example, it's known that hunting so boring and as they used to use this instrument in entrtaining themselves. Thus, why we don't consider that they use it to entertain themselves by its pleasant tones. Therefore, if this scenario is valid; then, the argument is considerably flawed.
Secondly, there other prospect for hunters' using for this musical instrument, they maybe use it as indication for danger. For example, if they are in hunting jurney; and they hunt wild animals. Those places are fraught of danger; therfore, they use it to grab their attentions in case of someone proned to any danger. Thus, if the above situation is correct, the conclusion which drawn in the original argumet is cosiderably unvalid.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed because of its reliance on unwarranted explanations as it maybe the situation could be has happened because other explanation as mentioned above. If the author provide more explanations or take the metioned explanations into his account, will be feasible to evaluate why this instrument has been found with the hunters.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1564 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.803 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...decan peoples rituals and celebrations. However recently they found it with Dodecans hu...
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Line 1, column 429, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'instruments'' or 'instrument's'?
Suggestion: instruments'; instrument's
...planations could be the reason for this instruments existence with the hunters. Firstly,...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...in entrtaining themselves. Thus, why we dont consider that they use it to entertain ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 303.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30363036304 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8729292372 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498349834983 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1077925545 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.133333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17686392219 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693501873839 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528739068184 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116359837783 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475238465441 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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