Universities have a significant effect on the students' decisions after graduation, particularly in which path should pursue. Thus, universities should advise students to take courses only within the field they have a passion for studying them. Therefore, I strongly agree with the prompt for encouraging the students to follow their interests for two crucial reasons.
Firstly, in the university study years, one can build up experience in the scope he wants to continue after graduation. For this reason, university should aid those students to study subjects which are directly related to their passion for acquiring the requisite skills for the job market. On the other hand, if a student study lots of different courses far from his interested scope will graduate only with survival skills, as well as will not do well during the study years. For example, if a student is impassionate with artificial intelligence; he should deal with statistical analysis and coding techniques; but, he will not be zealous to study internal designs or historical research. Therefore, if the university did not urge students to study what they are interested in, will weakly do their tasks in those other courses, and consequently, precluded them from gain adequate experience for the future career.
Secondly, build upon the previous point, if the colleges did not provoke their students to study their preferable courses; those students after graduation will have to work the easiest or first opportunity may they find regardless if it suits them or not. Of course, their choices will be influenced by their ephemeral experience; because they did not build this experience or even the required skills to decide which career suits them, and consequently, they will not do their work effectively. Recently, there are lots of researches demonstrate how our happiness level affects our performance in work. For example, if someone had to work as history teacher rather than his favourite job as a programmer; his performance will be tenuous as a coronally will fail to succeed and effect or even to be positively influencer. Thus, students must choose and pursue what they want to work on in the future.
In conclusion, universities should urge their students and also provide them with all support to follow their passion by studying the relevant courses for helping them in acquiring the requisite experience for their future career.
As the famous saying,” the…
As the famous saying,” the failure is the mother of the success”, this is statement elaborates to what extent the importance that failure urges the individual to get up again and then success. The prompt states that the best leader who listens to the feedback from whom lead. I strongly agree as this feedback acts as a mirror for the leader to be able to evaluate his leadership and then, doesn’t fail in that position for two reasons.
Feedback for any leader is a mirror for himself, for his actions and decisions whether they are on the right way or not. For example, if the CEO of a company and suggests releasing a new product to a new market. In this case, he needs to deem this suggestion and analyze it with the experts in the company to know if this specific product suits that market or not. Otherwise, he could fail to prose this new commodity and receive the desired success. This example illustrates how important not only listening to the feedback after individual decisions are made; it is also crucial seeing the whole picture before starting any step. Thus, the more the leader or officer listen to the feedback, the more can be successful.
The insightful leader who can avoid the others’ mistakes; otherwise, will naively repeat them. For example, in 2011, in Egypt, Egyptian had made a revolution to expel their president Moubarak. They decided that for his deadly mistakes towards his nation. Then, they could elect a new one, after one year from his tenure; they ousted him as well. Due to his obstinacy did not listen to the denizens and what was their complaint about his leadership. He was repeating all the mistakes for the former presidents; because he did not consider their opinions towards his leadership. The example demonstrates the importance of listening to who are led; Otherwise, that boss will go to the same way which does not have a right end. Listening to who are under our supervision not only helps in avoiding the mistakes but also helps in evolving our mindset. In addition, the quality of our decisions. The more take from other experience, the more enhance the one skills in how to lead effectively.
In conclusion, the successful leader who gives a chance to who is under oversight for saying their standpoints gives him their opinions and perspectives towards what he is doing to be able to succeed and improve his leadership skills. Moreover, to avoid others’ mistakes and not merely repeat them naively.
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...eir interests for two crucial reasons. Firstly, in the university study years, ...
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...uate experience for the future career. Secondly, build upon the previous point,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28865979381 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81981378312 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497422680412 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6611842086 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.571428571 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6428571429 5.21951772744 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23400777251 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100627283593 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821904953802 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168984958886 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803973189898 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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