The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument says that there are two stores are going to open in Salem suburb which has grown over 50 % in last three years and median income $75,000. Based on these information the two new stores assume that they will gain profits. First of all, the argument is rife of holes and unwarranted assumptions, the two stores should substantaite all these information and answer how will be reflectd in their sales.
Firstly , regarding Namen's assumption that increasing in the population will gauarantee an increasing in sales. However, to be able to say that, the author should first provide answer for this question, why there is an increase in the population? Sometime this increase indicates about unaware population lacking for education, and therefore, in such community will not be as the author imagine. This because such societies will concern about goods and food more than cloths. Therefore, if the above scenario is valid, then, the drawn conclusion from Namen store will considerably flawed.
Secondly, regarding Rosco store's assumption about such comunities that they are full of families, and therefore, they will achieve the desired profits. However, the store's owner should do a survey about this before makes such a trite conclusion. Such survey will help to know how many familes are there, how many children, and to what extent they consume cloths. Moreover, to be able to see the whole picture the author should answer if this salary is enough for affording the family's essential requirements as some families if they don't have enough many; they consider buying clothes not from the essential life's requirements. Therefore, there is another survey should be done to evaluate the social status for each family and if the salary enough only to subsist or they will able to buy clothes. Therefore, if the mentioned exapmles are correct, the argument doesn't hold water.
In conclusion, the argumengt as stands now is flawed as its reliance on unwaaranted assumptions. Therefore, the aother should provide more answers about what mentioned above which could by doing a systematic study research to be feasible to evaluate the argument effectively.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1769 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.158 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.311 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...years and median income 5,000. Based on these information the two new stores assume that they wil...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
... the two stores should substantaite all these information and answer how will be reflectd in thei...
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Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ll be reflectd in their sales. Firstly , regarding Namens assumption that increa...
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Line 2, column 582, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'flaw'
Suggestion: flaw
...sion from Namen store will considerably flawed. Secondly, regarding Rosco stores ass...
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Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...l requirements as some families if they dont have enough many; they consider buying ...
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Line 3, column 863, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...oned exapmles are correct, the argument doesnt hold water. In conclusion, the argume...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19197707736 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64852780918 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538681948424 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2793807463 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129957301207 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450167866761 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292157376789 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726190929388 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270509688745 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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