Undergraduate students majoring in Business or in the Sciences should not be required to take any courses in the Humanities since those courses won’t benefit their future careers.
There is no real excellence in life, instead, there are different ways can be taken based on the people’s desire and what would be more beneficial for them. The prompt says no need for an undergraduate student to study Humanities if they are willing to study science or business. I strongly agree with this standpoint; as a student who wants to study any field is fare away from Humanities will be more keen on studing what is closest to his major. The following essay will provide more reasons behind the student’s point of view.
If we look at the humanities courses, we will find different aspects, such as history, social science and literature. Not all undergraduate students will be interesting in these scops of Humanities course. For example, if a student wants to major in science for being a scientific researcher or clinical researcher, in this case, he will not zealous to study history and what were the most accomplishments for some people in the history such as Shakespeare or Beethoven. On the other hand, this student will be keen on investing the undergraduate time in his desirable major in science by studying Clinical trails, Physiology, and Epidemiology. Thus, although Humanities contains courses and some different deciplines could benefit students somehow, but it should not be compulsory in the curriculum to does not contributes to creating a great burden on the students’ shoulders.
Further, If Humanities became a part of the curriculum and the students have been asked to complete specific hours to get grades for graduation; students who will not major in any field relevant will weakly do in the Humanities subjects. This because they will not interested in such courses and as corollary will not get the requisite marks which required for their graduation. Quite the opposite will happen with those who willing to major in filed somehow related to Humanities courses. Therefore, by adding this course as an essential part of the curriculum will cause encumbrance on some students rather than others; that means will benefit some more than others and consequently will not achieve the desired effect.
In conclusion, students in their undergraduate period should be free in choosing what they willing and interested in, to be prepared for their future careers and adding Humanities or such courses which are not related to their interests will not benefit them as much as if they study and invest this crucial time in shaping their path by studying what is more involved in their major.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
... Not all undergraduate students will be interesting in these scops of Humanities course. Fo...
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Line 2, column 812, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'contribute'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: contribute
...ompulsory in the curriculum to does not contributes to creating a great burden on the stude...
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Line 2, column 812, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'contribute'
Suggestion: contribute
...ompulsory in the curriculum to does not contributes to creating a great burden on the stude...
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Line 4, column 266, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'interest'
Suggestion: interest
...es subjects. This because they will not interested in such courses and as corollary will n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, look, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07913669065 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82416025848 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482014388489 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2257338224 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.285714286 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7857142857 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296949003707 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118272502566 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065184717912 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208381235925 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575791901387 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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