Technology is deteriorating the people's ability to think.
Technology is present in every aspect of our lives nowadays. From the moment we wake up with our perfect timed smart phones to the complex softwares used in all the companies that employ millions of people, everyone relies on modern tools in order to permform their everyday activities. However, it is not reasonable to think that technology is causing people to think less, and therefore, it's ruining the human being's ability to solve their own problems.
First of all, despite the fact that technology made life much easier in some aspects, such as communicating with distant people as if they were in the same room, it also created new problems that are more complicated to solve. For instance, fifty years ago, it might be difficult for an employee to get in touch with the company's manager in order to present a solution, in case they were at different cities. Now this problem doesn't exist anymore, given the fact that they both have cell phones, computers and internet. However, in modern days, employees are surrounded by inputs given by their bosses, company's managers from different the company's sectors, the CEO, the wif that just crashed a car, his friends who are planning a party, and uncountable other people trying to get establish communications with him. Everyone is online 24 hours a day, and therefore, is available, so people have to deal with others in many ways that did not exist when this kind of technology wasn't a reality.
Moreover, even though the computers now are able to make complex calculations and to process an impressive amount of data in seconds, saving people a lot of time, every worker has now to deal with a great number of problems and it's solutions, that would be imaginable in the past. This created the necessity of developing a more complex way of thinking, and made creativity a valuable caractheristic for anyone working with complex issues. It is undeniable that technology now solves problems that would take a lot of time for people to do; however, it did create more complex ones that require a different, more envolved way of inteligence.
To sum up, despite the fact that technology did in fact make life much easier in many aspects of people's lives, it created a bunch of other problems and made people develop other abilities that made the humans think more and in more complex ways than ever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...s, and therefore, its ruining the human beings ability to solve their own problems. F...
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Line 2, column 426, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e at different cities. Now this problem doesnt exist anymore, given the fact that they...
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Line 2, column 976, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... not exist when this kind of technology wasnt a reality. Moreover, even though the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.841191067 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58927027816 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526054590571 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1579278028 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.583333333 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5833333333 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.21951772744 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1875887908 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786520286522 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900851253856 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13776718062 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641066213014 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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