In times of economic crisis, governments often reduce the money they spend in some areas. Of the three choices listed below, if a government is facing economic problems, which one should the government spend less money on?
1.Arts 2.Scientific research 3.Parks and public gardens
In my opinion, facing an economic crisis, the government should make a more reasonable decision that could benefit most people. This will raise the question of whether the government should cut off some budgets for a certain field, like arts, science research, or parks and public gardens. I will take the position that government should diminish some budges of arts.
First of all, spending less money on arts will affect fewer people. The national economic lifeline is usually industry, like the automobile industry in Germany, if the government doesn't invest enough money in scientific research, a great number of engineers will be affected. For instance, the Taiwanese government provided substantial financial support to some well-known companies in the last twenty years, such as TSMC and MediaTek. These companies utilized these funds for their advanced research, and engineers could invent more high-tech products by using their professional knowledge. These companies have earned enormous profits in the past decades, and this result lets these corporations have created more than eighty thousand job opportunities by using their earnings in recent years. By contrast, if we spend excessive capital on arts, we may not be capable to benefit a majority of local people.
Second, Arts will not necessarily be provided by governments. Conversely, Private agencies could operate lots of excellent arts events by themselves. For example, in 2015, Taipei Arts Festival was first held by a private company, which was named Taipei Visual Design. During the glamorous activity, this company exhibited lots of distinguished artworks, which attracted many people successfully. Thus, the tickets for this arts festival were sold out immediately three days after the opening, and the result of the Taipei Arts Festival was better than expected. Accordingly, this company decided to plan larger-scale art fairs in the future by using their profits. In contrast, parks and public gardens can’t be constructed by private companies. Instead, they will need to be designed carefully by all of the government departments in terms of the urban plan.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I think the government should reduce the budget for arts. For one thing, shortening the funds for arts will affect fewer people. For another thing, arts events could be held by some extraordinary private companies.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ld benefit most people. This will raise the question of whether the government should cut off some budg...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... industry in Germany, if the government doesnt invest enough money in scientific resea...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...uccessfully. Thus, the tickets for this arts festival were sold out immediately thre...
^^^^
Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y will need to be designed carefully by all of the government departments in terms of the ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, conversely, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, another thing, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40159574468 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7345379446 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563829787234 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6050173102 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.55 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.21951772744 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244017887206 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734646380558 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058308807601 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151314864589 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545940168475 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ld benefit most people. This will raise the question of whether the government should cut off some budg...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... industry in Germany, if the government doesnt invest enough money in scientific resea...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...uccessfully. Thus, the tickets for this arts festival were sold out immediately thre...
^^^^
Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y will need to be designed carefully by all of the government departments in terms of the ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, conversely, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, another thing, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40159574468 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7345379446 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563829787234 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6050173102 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.55 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.21951772744 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244017887206 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734646380558 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058308807601 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151314864589 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545940168475 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.