Many companies provide important products or services but also damage the environment Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty such as a higher or a large fine when they cause | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Many companies provide important products or services but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty, such as a higher or a large fine, when they cause environmental damage. Other people think there are better ways to stop the companies from harming the environment. Which view do you agree with and why?

Many big-scale companies contribute themselves to manufacturing lots of leading products. However, this will raise the question of whether the government should require these companies to pay a penalty when these enterprises are damaging the environment. I agree with the statement.

First of all, if the governments require these companies to pay a higher fine, it will place a heavy burden on these businesses. For example, TSMC was the top-notch semiconductor chips manufacturing company in the entire world. In the 2010s, TSMC earned over ten billion dollars each year, which accounted for a huge part of the GDP of Taiwan. However, TSMC also induced a good deal of extremely serious environmental issues, such as a handsome amount of waste water with heavy metal. As a result, in 2020, the local government asked TSMC to pay a large fine being up to one hundred million dollars because of its inappropriate disposal of sewage. In order not to encounter the same penalty in the future, TSMC decided to establish many advanced facilities to deal with its discharge of sewage. In contrast, if the government had not required TSMC to pay the higher fine, TSMC might have not copied with its environmental problems actively.

Second, if the governments demand the companies to pay a large fine, make the public to pay attention to the environmental issues caused by these enterprises. For example, Media Tek was the first-rate semiconductor chips designing company all over the world. In the 2000s, Media Tek gained a lot of profits per year, which was up to five billion dollars. However, Media Tek also produced many highly severe environmental problems, such as emitting a good deal of greenhouse gases, like carbon dioxide. Thus, the local government required Media Tek to pay a large fine, which was up to fifty million dollars. Moreover, because lots of media covered this news, many local people realized that this business had generated much harm to their environment. Thus, a good deal of people initiated a campaign to protest these negative behaviors caused by Media Tek. Finally, Media Tek agreed to gradually reduce its emission of greenhouse gases in the future. By contrast, if the government had not asked Media Tek to pay a huge fine, these local people might have not been aware of these environment issues produced by Media Tek.

To sum up, I agree with the statement that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to pay a penalty. On one hand, the companies will be forced to address their negative influences on the environment to avoid to pay the high fine again. On the other hand, the local people will also pay attention to the environmental problems caused by these companies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ding products. However, this will raise the question of whether the government should require these com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 13.8261648746 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00873362445 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79260629365 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438864628821 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5041637511 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.272727273 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8181818182 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272757046174 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856132831168 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778395766856 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196320614947 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826118790853 0.0645574589148 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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