Children should spend more time studying and playing or helping with the household chores?
Everyone has lots of valuable opportunities to learn different matters in a growing stage. This will raise the question of whether children should spend more time studying and playing or helping with the household chores. In my opinion, I will take the position that children should spend more time studying and playing.
First of all, Children could absorb much diverse knowledge from different territories, like astronomy or architecture, to motivate their interests by studying. Take my previous experiences, for example. When I was a child, I liked to read a good deal of astronomical books, like Nasa space shuttle collections, or Research the secrets of stars. For one thing, these books could benefit me by conveying lots of useful astronomical information, like the distance between the Sun and Earth and the meaning of light-year. For another thing, these books could greatly motivate me to strive for becoming an outstanding astronaut, such as providing me with a triumphant story about a Chinese astronaut. By contrast, if I chose to do lots of household chores, I would not be able to gain this invaluable knowledge and generate this incredible dream.
Second, Children could learn teamwork by playing. My previous experiences will be a suitable instance. When I was a child, I often touched many different sports, like football or basketball, by playing with my friends. For one thing, we could master many different sports skills in the competitions with my teammates, like pick and roll or shooting skills. For another thing, we could also learn the spirit of teamwork by experiencing lots of difficulties and efforts, like undertaking the failure of a sports game or practicing together. In contrast, if I chose to engage in too many household chores, I would not be capable of gaining these precious experiences instead.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I choose to spend more time studying and playing. Studying and playing could let us absorb more different knowledge from different territories. Moreover, studying and playing could also provide plenty of opportunities to learn the spirit of teamwork.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ers in a growing stage. This will raise the question of whether children should spend more time studyin...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ce. When I was a child, I often touched many different sports, like football or basketball, by...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...friends. For one thing, we could master many different sports skills in the competitions with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, another thing, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20289855072 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92031826505 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501449275362 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9411698501 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7222222222 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94444444444 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273540935376 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097746903976 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154623784639 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225740615607 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1975145304 0.0645574589148 306% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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