"The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments."
The author claims that the artistic reations are the true of civilization rather than scientific accomplishments.
According to me, the true value of civilization is the social, economical, cultural and the scientific well-being of the people in a society or
nation. Civilization is an amalgation of both artistic creations and scientific accomplishments. I am not conveinced with the claim
that civilization is more about artistic creations rather than its scientific accomplishments. This can be illustrated with some examples.
There are many civilizations in the world which were started hundreds of years ago. Among them some of the popular civilizations are Mohenjo-daro
of India, The Pyramids of Gaza- Egyptian civilization, Chineese civilization and so on. In most of these civilizations,the people of
that society are developed in all the fields such as arts, education etc.,. In all the civilizations the most common accomplishment is construction of different different structures.
In all of these civilizations development is not alone possible with artistic sense without technological or scientific accomplishments.
Buildings and monuments cannot be constructured with artistic knowledge alone. In the same way scientific knowledge alone cannot pave the way to
new civilizations. So, both are essentially important.
For example, the scientific accomplishments without artistic ideas cannot be appreciated for its contributions as it cannot attract
the people.
In conclusion, I say that the true value of civilization is reflected not only in artistic creations but also in its scientific
accomplishments. This statement is well explained in the above lines and is bolstered with the examples mentioned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ther than scientific accomplishments. According to me, the true value of civilization is the ...
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...well-being of the people in a society or nation. Civilization is an amalgation of...
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...-being of the people in a society or nation. Civilization is an amalgation of both ...
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...s. I am not conveinced with the claim that civilization is more about artistic cre...
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...arted hundreds of years ago. Among them some of the popular civilizations are Mohenjo-daro ...
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...e popular civilizations are Mohenjo-daro of India, The Pyramids of Gaza- Egyptian...
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...pular civilizations are Mohenjo-daro of India, The Pyramids of Gaza- Egyptian c...
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...nd so on. In most of these civilizations,the people of that society are developed ...
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... of these civilizations,the people of that society are developed in all the fields...
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... the fields such as arts, education etc.,. In all the civilizations the most commo...
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...ommon accomplishment is construction of different different structures. In all of these civilizat...
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...omplishment is construction of different different structures. In all of these ...
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...different structures. In all of these civilizations development is not alone possible with ...
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...c knowledge alone cannot pave the way to new civilizations. So, both are essentia...
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...owledge alone cannot pave the way to new civilizations. So, both are essentially...
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...s contributions as it cannot attract the people. In conclusion, I say that th...
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...tic creations but also in its scientific accomplishments. This statement is well ...
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...creations but also in its scientific accomplishments. This statement is well explained in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 254.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90551181102 5.05705443957 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.71704629146 2.79657885939 133% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 215.323595506 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8712432702 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.75 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.97078651685 262% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393312997961 0.243740707755 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133467353516 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149134729698 0.0758088955206 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152003507065 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135272950989 0.0667264976115 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.7 12.1639044944 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.